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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2002-11-22 11:37 AM


She's spent all day in a stupor
sometimes avoiding him,
other times filled with
pathetic attempts at
"working it out".

Phone calls were made,
at least lunch was half decent,
until she passed out
on a cot in the nurse's station
and slept through school.

Watching the clock
and it's only four-thirty
she knows it's an hour
before he'll be home,
to "work it out".

She pulls on her coat,
trudges through cold
parting it like the thickness
is just a million tiny
strands of hair.

Five thirty, six-thirty,
time passes quickly
she laughs with her friends,
and pretends not to care,
but she's watching the clock.

Caving in, she picks up the phone,
dials seven digits,
crosses her fingers,
holding the cigarette
as she pushes the window open.

"hello?"
"Hey....."
She loves the sound of his voice now,
but when she's crying,
she hates its monotone ring.

Whirling, snowflakes,
the cold and no shoes,
she's on the porch and
he's hugging her tighter than ever,
whispering.

"I'm sorry I hurt you,
I never meant to hurt you,"
and she murmurs
"I thought you didn't care,
or atleast that's how it sounds."

He wont let her see his face
because he's crying,
and she hugs him,
wanting to see,
longing to wipe away his tears.

She had something to say
but at the last moment,
she chickened out,
and she's back on the phone
saying "it's me".

"Wie ein Quadrat in einem Kreis, eck' ich immer wieder an obwohl ich doch schon lange weiß, daß ich niemals ändern kann." ~Wizo

© Copyright 2002 Allysa - All Rights Reserved
Stained Glass
Junior Member
since 2002-11-14
Posts 10
Why Georgia
1 posted 2002-11-22 03:17 PM


Excuse me?
EXCUSE ME?!

Who on earth gave you permission to come into my life and write about it all on here?

Wow. It echos the words and events that have been going though my head the past week. I think it is just great. It relates to me so personally... WOW ::saved::



"Zoom in as they burn the past to the ground and feel the heat of the future's glow..." Jonathan Larson - RENT

[This message has been edited by Stained Glass (11-24-2002 03:36 PM).]

CloudedDreams
Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 210
My Fantasy Realm
2 posted 2002-11-23 05:02 PM


........
I am speechless
the emotion and wonder and feeling...OOOHH
it is GREAT!! Keep it up! ^.^

Yes there will be tommorrow, but will you be there to greet it?

lildevil
Junior Member
since 2002-11-21
Posts 47
missouri,usa
3 posted 2002-11-23 08:54 PM


WOW
that was amazing
it is so hard to come up with words to describe besides wonderful

Stained Glass
Junior Member
since 2002-11-14
Posts 10
Why Georgia
4 posted 2002-11-24 03:37 PM


Here I respond to this again. It didnt get into my library the first time. and BUMP! :-D

"Zoom in as they burn the past to the ground and feel the heat of the future's glow..." Jonathan Larson - RENT

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
5 posted 2002-11-25 01:26 AM



Allysa~
Yet another excellent write from you.
You keep getting better all the time, and I'm
really enjoying your work.
This is very well written and with some great
imagery thrown in as well.
Very nicely done.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

TopGunLauren
Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California
6 posted 2002-11-25 01:42 AM


Wow this is an awsome piece that you have posted and I can relate to it so well. But anyway keep up the awsome work and I can't wait to read more.
  Lauren

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