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CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14
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Selah, WA, USA

0 posted 2002-11-15 06:06 PM


Hey!  I wrote this a couple days ago...  It was a challenge I gave myself a few months ago to be able to write an acrostic sonnet, having a word down the side and also in sonnet format.  Anyway, let me know what you think.  

FOREVERLASTING

For so long you were there
On and on I cry for you still
Real love, distance can't tear
Ever flowing love, my heart you fill
Visions of our love cross my mind
Each day we were together I see
Reality sets in and you I can't find
Lasting love it must not be
Alas, my love, I'll see this through
Standing before you, old feelings return
Things have changed, but our love is true
I love you, yes, there's much to learn
Nothing can make me think this isn't real
God only knows how wonderful I feel

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?  

[This message has been edited by CwboyAtHeart (11-15-2002 07:14 PM).]

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clve527
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since 2002-07-08
Posts 200

1 posted 2002-11-15 06:17 PM


What form of sonnet is this exactly?

Casey

ryanna lauryn
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since 2002-11-09
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KS
2 posted 2002-11-15 06:18 PM


in three simple words, i can sum what i think up...it was beautiful.

~*~Ryan~*~

"consider how hard it is to change yourself and you'll understand what little chance you have in trying to change others." -jacob m. braude

boy and his spirit
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since 2002-08-26
Posts 41
within my heart
3 posted 2002-11-17 12:51 PM


i reccomend you listen to the some Again I Go Unnoticed by Dashboard Confessional. That song, and this poem, are similar, and true works of polished satisfaction.
Peach
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since 2002-11-17
Posts 33

4 posted 2002-11-17 05:09 PM


I thought this poem was really good. I'm impressed, sometimes trying to work with the whole 'word going down the side' thing can make the poem sound too forced to fit the word, but you did great.

If don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything.

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