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Jester
Junior Member

since 2002-08-13

Posts 41
The dark corners of your mind

0 posted 2002-11-11 02:13 PM

Just like old times
Every day is a warm and comforting
Somethings will never change
Too bad this is not one of those things
Everyone seems different and cruel
Reassure me...just like old times.

I am your God, will you kill me now or shall I be continually suicidal?

LoveBug

Moderator

Member Elite

since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

1 posted 2002-11-11 02:27 PM

This is really good, but it's sad as well. I think we all long for times when we had someone to comfort us... good job, though. Great answer to the challenge.

Most of us go to our grave with our music still inside of us.

anya
Member

since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

2 posted 2002-11-11 03:47 PM

Yes I enjoyed this very much, had a really good melancholy air to it, this was definetly the right poem for me to read tonight! Well done

Anya

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

3 posted 2002-11-11 04:37 PM

Jester~
Very nice job on this one. I enjoyed reading it.
Challenge well met.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

4 posted 2002-11-13 03:39 PM

I dunno Jester... kinda simple, don't you think? "Just like old times" is a tad cliche, so is "some things never change." But hey, you knew I would say that.

It's nice to see you in here again, Hughes. Hope to see more of you, for sure.

Parasite

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
~Aldous Huxley

Jester
Junior Member

since 2002-08-13

Posts 41
The dark corners of your mind

5 posted 2002-11-13 07:37 PM

yes...it is quite a simple one...but i've been experiencing a very long writers block...and i just had to write something...even this...to come up with some new ideas. Thanx for the feedback everyone though.
Jester

I am your God, will you kill me now or shall I be continually suicidal?

boy and his spirit
Junior Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 41
within my heart

6 posted 2002-11-17 12:30 PM

YOU ARE MY HERO!!!!!
GOOD WORK WORKING GIRL!!

Wind

Member Elite

since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

7 posted 2002-11-17 05:04 PM

Yes, that's nice...

"Sticks and stones will break my bones,
But words will break my heart"

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