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knightlyshadows
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obscured vision

0 posted 2002-11-05 05:36 AM



slender visage croones in weep
symptomed blush stains white cheek
flush of aura, paled child's tear
stab of jealous, misplaced in prayer

fear in modest crush with awe
tonic quaffed with smoothness flaw
facaded glory of impersonal pride
wonderment carried, joyousness abide

swift martyr in prejudice dwell
left remains of ashened frail
careless gesture in fallen grace
existence revoked, forever eraced


“A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.”

Getting away, isn't Running away.

"The hurt that you try to hide, is killing me."

[This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (11-05-2002 05:49 AM).]

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1 posted 2002-11-06 12:48 PM


LOVE the title, Tiff.  Your style is starting to grow very nicely, which is evident when I look at this poem... I see a lot of your personal touch shining through here.

Loved the emotional images... strong work, Tiff.

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2 posted 2002-11-06 07:23 PM


i really enjoyed the rhyming in this poem thought that it was kewl

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

chasing rain
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3 posted 2002-11-06 09:13 PM


TIFF! ^_^

Loved this! *points at poem* ^_^ Though I had to look up some of the words. ^^; Expanding vocab can be fun! XD

*adds to library*

Leah

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4 posted 2002-11-07 04:22 AM


<--that's all I can say... er.. you did spell "erased" wrong though

I'm so cute!

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