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OH NO |
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Chloey Member
since 2002-09-29
Posts 74in a silver mustang convertible |
OH NO,your kidding He didnt do that Cant he see He cant drive He doesnt know how OH NO he did it Did you hear that POW!!? It's all right He'll be just fine It gave me a fright Because he was mine My old boyfriend went driving drunk at 14 he crashed and was in coma for months this is about him You can fall from the sky, |
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Jester Junior Member
since 2002-08-13
Posts 41The dark corners of your mind |
this seems like a pretty serious subject to be writing so lightheartedly about. But however you feel about it is your opinion i suppose. i found it to be nice and light and fun...but at the same time very harsh and dangerous because of the nature of your inspiration. Thanx for the read. I am your God, will you kill me now or shall I be continually suicidal? |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
I also took this to be somewhat lighthearted and casually toned... like it was intended to be a comedic piece. And then at the end you let on your inspiration, I felt bad about taking it non-seriously... What an odd way to write something on this subject matter. I do commend you on being original. Parasite |
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Chloey Member
since 2002-09-29
Posts 74in a silver mustang convertible |
Thank you for the responses!!!!I know I haven't posted in a while maybe I lost my groove!!!*LOL*  *$*Chloey*$* You can fall from the sky, |
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