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0 posted 2002-10-31 08:58 AM


"Devote My Life"
(10/01/02)
© 2002 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved

Verse 1
OHo...
Somewhere,
Someday,
I will,
Always.
(Sweat-Heart)
Oh, and you,
Won't cry,
Alone,
Inside, no.
OhOoo...
For it will get,
Better,
Let me be the,
(Giver)
Giver....

Chorus
Devote my life
To these blue eyes,
These poudy lips
And special times.
Devote my life
To these two hands,
This melting smils
A forever dance.

Verse 2
Oho...
Promise,
You good, yeah.
I swear,
Understood.
(Sweat-Heart)
In time,
I'll grow,
To love,
And, to know.
OhOoo...
Only you, hun,
(Better)
Better,
Let me be the,
(Giver)
Giver...

Chorus
Devote my life
To these blue eyes,
These poudy lips
And special times.
Devote my life
To these two hands,
This melting smils
A forever dance.

Bridge
Ohoooo....
I thought that you knew,
baby, I Love you.
All my emotions,
You own yes it's true,
And everything I,
Promise to you.
(Baby let me be your, giver....)

Chorus
Devote my life
To these blue eyes,
These poudy lips
And special times.
Devote my life
To these two hands,
This melting smils
A forever dance.

© Copyright 2002 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved
quietlydying
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1 posted 2002-11-01 03:33 AM


nicely done.  this was a good write.

but i do think you would get more replies if you replied to other's work a little more.



thanks for sharing.  

/jen/



what if they gave a war, and nobody came...

[This message has been edited by quietlydying (11-01-2002 03:34 AM).]

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