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One Year
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Devils Angel 666 Member
since 2001-11-30
Posts 71CT, USA 
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Would you believe, If I were to tell you That it has been One Year? I can hardly believe it myself. But then you ask 'What's been One Year?' And to the question, I'd have to stop And think. Stop and think To see how I Would be able to Explain, In one word, And only One word. And that One word Would not be a word But a name. A name which Would someday Be followed by mine. A name which I hold and treasure Dearly. For the person That holds this name I love With all my heart. The person For which this name belongs, Is very, Very, Special to me. For this person, I would give anything. I bet your wondering Who it is That is soo special To me. 'What person could ever Mean that much To one person'you say And I say, The name of this person is Heather With Heather During this past One year There has been Many things, Many obsticals That we have Had to overcome. As you can see, We have overcome All obsticals That have Come up during This past One year. People say, Long distance things Never work. To that I say 'If it never worked, Then they Weren't ment to be' The better part Of this One year Relationship Has been long distance. And Our love Has never been stronger. Heather, You mean more to me Than words could ever express, Than the most spectacular And beautiful of ALL sunsets. You are soo beautiful To me, And always will be. I wish that you Could understand What you mean to me. You are as the warm Spring morning sun Is to a spring flower. A nesessity For survival. You are my soul mate. We are Forever. Happy Anniversary Heather I love you! |
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Devils Angel 666 Member
since 2001-11-30
Posts 71CT, USA |
It's been a while since I posted last. I don't think this is the best I've ever done but it just all come out. The last part is the better part. |
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Baby_Angel123 Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 63Unity, ME |
Hey Hun Happy Anniversary! I love you sooooooo much. "O" and by the way i loved ya poem, it wasn't as bad as you said it was. In fact it wasn't bad at all. Luv Ya! Love Always, ~Angel~ [This message has been edited by Baby_Angel123 (10-19-2002 09:28 PM).] |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
'Ello :waves: I have not seen ya round here great job luffed it see ya round town dude ( happy mood don't ask!!!!!!) Ri ~* Love humiliates you, hatered cradles you-White Olender *~ |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Not bad at all, Devils Angel. I think you could have made this poem flow better by making it a tad less vertical... maybe grouping more of your really small lines together. that would probably make it read through better, but it's just my opinion. This is sweet, I enjoyed reading it. Long distance can work out if you try hard enough, and don't let the distance get to you...  Best wishes. Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
What I honestly feel about your poem, huh? Well I liked it. I thought it had a lot of that passion stuff people like to throw around. I'm a huge critique on relationships, maybe it's because I had one in highschool that lasted 4years and ended up going completely wrong in the end. I agree with you, people who break up due to distance are usually not meant to be together. A friend of mine once told me "anything that complicated wasn't meant to be". I liked that. Maybe you could use that advice with other aspects of your life. Anyhow, a poem well done. Happy ANni.  This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'. |
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