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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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i Crossing the still Just empty rooms facing the sea a thin line of haze A bit of color: the tide skims the green blades; lonely willows touch softly the wind and water a thirst for drink How autumn looks different when intertwined with dangling moonlight and forming thunderstorms Our passion known to sunsets and horizons seemingly endless Naked eyes searching for musical words of psalms Did we know the fire clouded the glass or did we watch the storm cascade the dawn -- In an empty boat we lost each other: the sea glass shattered ripples-- will mark the headstone; { my faith in words-he escaped all definition, with the eye of my understanding} ii The night made its gentle transition answering a theory to practice silence surrounded the island your shoulders have kept steady as you d r i f t e d, iii I Watched The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (07-07-2002 01:29 AM).] |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
LC, I am speechless hon....(that's not easy for me either...) this is outstanding hon. Have missed you soooo.... Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
How autumn looks different when intertwined with dangling moonlight and forming thunderstorms Some very beautiful imagery, Lauren... and an awesome poem.  ~ poetic hugsLyra |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Lauren...I may as well throw my pen away now! THIS is outstanding writing! Love it sweetie. ~Hugs~ |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
stunning writing~ beautiful. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Lauren, I am shaking my head at the imagery alone...the feelings you left are undescribable... |
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JAR Junior Member
since 2001-11-06
Posts 34 |
{ my faith in words-he escaped all definition, with the eye of my understanding} silence surrounds' You "haunt me" in a tremendous way. But I love J. C. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lauren, How do you do that?  Show you care to those you love...today. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
just wow ~~sighing~~  I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Ripples are but a sign of time, time moving from then to what may be ..... and sea glass, broken or not , reflects your souls beauty .... simply remarkable!!!  |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
This is truly a masterpiece. I am keeping it in my library !! ~mycafe Keep counting your blessings |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Lauren, I see that your pen is doing magic before my very eyes, and it flows like a river of tranquil light!! Excellent, as you always do, my friend!! Open the door and let your adventure begin!!! |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
I enjoyed this poem so much... all those images... beautiful!!! Neeraja |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I love a good image filled poem but yours is exceptional and I am in awe of the visions you paint and still manage to surge our minds and eyes with such powerful emotions. Superb piece of writing and I love the way you broke it up into 3 acts. Make sure you recognize love as the gift it is and not a need that is out of focus |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 YAY!!! Oh my gosh, I love this, sweet friend, I love the surreal beauty of these words you always write, this is breathtaking! (kiss on cheek) This is a true triloy of fine passion, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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cherrypoptart Member
since 2002-06-09
Posts 109state of wordthiness |
Very well written composition! |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Thank you all for understanding and reading...I appreciate all the kind comments and responses....HUGSSS and love to all... Lauren~ The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Lauren- What an incredible write! Your use of imagery is amazing. I absolutely love this! Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Wonderful write, enjoyed enjoyed. Parker |
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