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Apple Pie |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Apple Pie I baked a pie of rhyme and deed An apple pie including seed And served it in a silver dish With syrup called just make a wish. I ate it with a thoughtful spoon Beneath a silver glowing moon Spit the seeds upon the earth For future cognoscente and birth The taste was that of daily wear Some of grief and some despair Some of dance in joyous wile And some I think with just a smile. Each person tastes different dill Those apples made of symbols fill And what you taste is in your flare Your condiments of do and dare You made the crust for it to bake It’s home made pie for goodness sake. |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
You write in such a way I see every thoughtful movement and I like the fact you know I know which way your mind is bent |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
I like applepie a lot! Especially homemade. But the ingredients and the presentation of this one is so special... I like it!!! Neeraja |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Soleil Noir Just plain old applepie, Thank you dear. Neeraja You bake it you eat it, LOL Thank you for the read and reply. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
fantastically delightful piece, Seymour!!! filled with rhythm and light with a powerful bit of messages woven in Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy You are delicious! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
VAS, So you liked the applepie. LOL Martie,   |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You shake it You make it You bake it and last but not least...you rake it... Much wisdom here Sir Sy... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Each person tastes different dill Those apples made of symbols fill And what you taste is in your flare Your condiments of do and dare Very cool write, Sy. If ya need any more apples, give a yell...I've got a great tree full of 'em! Forgetting all I'm lacking |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Magnus, You shake it You make it You bake it and last but not least...you rake it... You got the idea. Duncan, If you got a tree of them allpes in your back yard, I'd get ride of it. LOL Thanks Dunc. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I baked a pie of rhyme and deed An apple pie including seed And served it in a silver dish With syrup called just make a wish. I ate it with a thoughtful spoon Beneath a silver glowing moon Spit the seeds upon the earth For future cognoscente and birth =============================== Each person tastes different dill Those apples made of symbols fill And what you taste is in your flare Your condiments of do and dare You made the crust for it to bake It's home made pie for goodness sake. ============================== Sy-babers...there are so many clever lines of metaphor and analogies of life's wisdom in this, that all I can do is shake me head and smile I as read this gem... like the Apple metaphor you wrote to poetic perfection here.... one needs to first polish and admire the beauty of this poems surface...then peel the layers and sample its sweet wisdoms and its bittersweet truths that one might miss if only looking at the eye appeal....then slice and dice it and take the parts that we can use to better ourselves...and wrap it in a crust of trust and rhyme and we have a Sy-poetic pie. What I am trying to say is... DO YOU KNOW HOW COOL THIS IS???  Look at each of these lines on their own... each one stands to prove my point... With syrup called just make a wish. I ate it with a thoughtful spoon Spit the seeds upon the earth For future cognoscente and birth Those apples made of symbols fill Your condiments of do and dare "A thoughtful spoon !! apples made of symbols fill !! Condiments of dare !!" Gawwwd I love the way your mind works... and the way ya make me think and look at poetry. *winkiewinkie* later-apple of my eye-gator  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Sy, you always write with great wisdom. I appreciate this very much indeed. Now...to peel away the layers here.... to see what lies beneath. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, You are my golden fleece. one needs to first polish and admire the beauty of this poems surface...then peel the layers and sample its sweet wisdoms and its bittersweet truths that one might miss if only looking at the eye appeal....then slice and dice it and take the parts that we can use to better ourselves...and wrap it in a crust of trust and rhyme and we have a Sy-poetic pie. Your insight into what I write is amazing. If what you say is true than I am happy and content. For that is the soul of my goal. Winkiewinkie Randy Stinky Enchantress, Each pie will be different I know yours will be sweet. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Wisdom and the words to express it are definitely in the index of your poetic cookbook. So cool are the metaphors and the analogies of life baked into this tasty creation of yours. Very much enjoyed the write and it's wisdom. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mark, Wonderful comment, I thank you much. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
They call me crusty and a flake So that must be the pie I bake!  Like the ingredient of philosophy and wisdom you baked into this one, Sy. We always get our just desserts |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
OK you have made me yearn for Apple Pie....YUMMY poem SY~...  Lauren~ The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
You did a wonderful job of making me hungry, Sy............. Now, I want some apple pie really bad, and the bakeries are closed and I don't have the ingredients to make one... Maybe I'll just bake an apple.... This is a deliciously different poem.  ~ hugs of yumLyra |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, Thanks you crusty old flake. Lauren, Yummy reply. Lyra, Your sweeter than the apple pie. |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
Could I have mine with a big scoop of French vanilla ice cream? paladin |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
The taste was that of daily wear Some of grief and some despair Some of dance in joyous wile And some I think with just a smile. Oh I like that!! Good write Seymour. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
YAY!!! Oh Seymour, this is soooooo beautifully yummy, sweet friend, the apples of earth indeed resaemble such wisdom and beauty passed on from the Garden of Eden as the worm can bring in gloom yet the taste is always sweet when we get fown deep! (smiles) This is lovely, sweet friend, I just love your unique style, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (07-07-2002 02:17 PM).] |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
A sweet and spicy poem, just like the name. I love it. Nan |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling boy, yes I’m back Shhh I’ve half hinched Paul’s computer, he’s in Cypress he doesn’t need it right now This is incredible writing so beautifully constructed as always your writing is exceptionally fine, and I love the flow of this it is sooooo smooth. I make a very good apple pie, living opposite an apple orchard it would be a waste if I didn’t. Many is the time the kids would go scrumping, I know very lawless to encourage them but as it happens the farmer didn’t mind. Now of course they are far too old to be clambering over the wall. They could have course walked the whole distance of 12 yards and entered through the gate but from what I understand it wasn’t scrumping if you did it the easy way. Enough of this idle chat and back to the poem Fabulous writing darling man utterly utterly fabulous, never do you fail to supply my eyes with delight. x x x Did you miss me? Well I missed you  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire Thy coolness and they balm Let sense be dumb let flesh retire Speak through the eathquake wind and fire [This message has been edited by Marsha (07-07-2002 07:28 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
paladin Why not and thank you for the read ethome, Thank you my friend. Noah, Yes the apple is a good symbol. Pilgrimage Thank you for the nice reply. Marsha, Yes I missed you and I enjoyed the story. |
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