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Doug Pretorius
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since 2001-04-08
Posts 81
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2002-06-09 09:41 AM


A Prayer of Renewal
June 8th, 2002
Copyright 2002 Doug Pretorius

in fields seeds of pain
sprout for clouds of rain
filling in the skies
with magnetic dense disguise
burning in the ocean
to feed children's cries
demonstrate your love
by drowning them in lies
it's no different now
then it's ever going to be
and how it always was
is all the same disease
so spare me of your temper
and your impassioned speeches please
admit you are no better
then us down here on our knees
we're begging for a rage
to fill the ocean blue
to make it flood its banks
and start the earth anew

© Copyright 2002 Doug Pretorius - All Rights Reserved
Verve
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since 1999-06-23
Posts 348
Singapore
1 posted 2002-06-09 12:38 PM




Hi Doug ...

A rather intense poem you have here ...

The sense of hope in the last lines contrasts very aptly the dark imagery you have wrought throughout the entire piece ...

A very interesting read ...  

[This message has been edited by Verve (06-09-2002 12:43 PM).]

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
2 posted 2002-06-09 12:42 PM


Doug
It's good to see you here at Passions. I remember you from elsewhere.
This is a very powerful intense poem but much in it needs to be written about....good work!

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