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Khryannalin
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since 2003-03-23
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0 posted 2003-03-29 05:54 PM



Layers

I - Body

Solid but permeable
The easily violated shell
Delicate and lovely
To transcend a lower hell

Unsatifying in self-appearance
Appealing to unknown eyes
Hands sweep across the surface
To cause a moan or cry

Bask in selfish glory
Proud of attention got
Remember you have beauty
Even when the body rots

II - Heart

The continuous working organ
Never gets a rest
First slow, then fast in rhythm
As emotions know the best

Follow towards some happiness
Abandoned to live in woe
Broken and rebuilt again
To "feel" but never "know"

Hopes are always present
Fears are quick to live
The heart is attached to many strings
That pull instead of give

III - Mind

The most restless is inquiring
Curious, but half-known
For though the thoughts continue
Their not always shown

Analyze the life-part
To find the big "fit in"
Afraid it's just a concept
And end where we begin

The mind can be deceiving
Despite its bind to all
Even if truth isn't real
It can make us fall

IV - Soul

An idea of something more
Not seen but still believed
The last level is not of substance
It's merely preconceived

Told to be of beauty
Capable to take away
All the fears of unknown reals
To dream of a better place

Perhaps drift beyond words
Maybe to dare return
Live another life of levels
And remember what is learned


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Alicethruglass
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1 posted 2003-03-29 06:52 PM


Perhaps drift beyond words
Maybe to dare return
Live another life of levels
And remember what is learned


I had to give this several reads and pull
from it what I was comfortable with.
so much sadness in it :
"The heart is attached to many strings
That pull instead of give"

a good strong write.

~A~/M



Sunshine
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2 posted 2003-03-29 06:55 PM


Khryannalin, this is beautiful, very insightful, and very worthy of being in the book.  Thank you for taking time, and sharing your talent, to bring this to us.

        Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?...

carol
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3 posted 2003-04-12 09:23 PM


Very nice and it should be in the book got my vote

Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become
Lots of Love
Rita

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4 posted 2003-04-12 11:38 PM


Khryannalin~ I really like the way you write.
Looking forward to more from you...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

LUV_R_GIRL2379
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since 2003-04-09
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5 posted 2003-04-13 12:26 PM


"Fears are quick to live,the heart is attached to many strings,that pull instead of give"~~~~i especially loved these lines! you have an extraordinary talent! i hope to see more of your work!
vlraynes
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6 posted 2003-04-13 05:08 AM



Khryannalin~
I love the way you did this.
Very insightful and an enjoyable read.
I'll be looking for more from you.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

SPIRIT
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7 posted 2003-04-13 09:00 PM


A most interesting and enjoyable write.
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