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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2002-03-25 09:31 PM

~Ramble Series~

And I fell into place
Trusting the journey
Where poetry lives
Among shadows,
Winds of time no longer blow softly

I exist to
Look inward
To quiet pools
Of peace, hoping, but
Flowers do not bloom
Anymore and
The mist seeps
Slowly outward, barely visible

My basic needs
Seemingly never to be found;
I am a restless plunge of
Mystery, uneven, guilty,
Shifting lines thinner,
Absorbed in
Music, trying to compose
Certain, harmonic tones
In the note of the composer

Yet I've held on through
The black waves,
Slapping and stinging
Passing over
Brilliant white sands
To see the girl standing
Shoreline, peering
From a mask of destiny forming a
Faith of belief
Failing in reality

Fade me upon the land
Unfold my words in
Gentle manner
Give my pattern
To the rain soaked earth,
Lead me to the edge
Of the sea
And let me read aloud
My soul

Greeneyes~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (03-25-2002 11:26 PM).]

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

1 posted 2002-03-25 09:34 PM

Seeing the girl standing
Shoreline, peering
From a mask of destiny forming a
Faith of belief
Failing in reality

Oh how lovely this is, Lauren...

~lots of hugggsss~

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2002-03-25 09:56 PM

GreenEyes~
This may very well be one of your best pieces to date~

'Trusting the journey
Where poetry lives'

It's so delicately lovely~
Written in the sands of time~
Beautiful, Lauren~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

3 posted 2002-03-25 10:00 PM

Fade me upon the land
Unfold my words in
Gentle manner
Give my pattern
To the rain soaked earth,
Lead me to the edge
Of the sea
And let me read aloud
My soul

lovely soft thoughts as always Lauren.i always enjoy your words..hugssss

~Vic

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

4 posted 2002-03-25 10:02 PM

Lauren,
And in your wanderings may you always find peace and joy. Word pictures that challenge my mind and my soul. Thank you.

Everybody thinks of changing humanity and nobody thinks of changing himself. Leo Tolstoy

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

5 posted 2002-03-25 10:06 PM

Lauren, this is truly one of your best,
bar none....simply is...

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2002-03-25 10:14 PM

Fade me upon the land
Unfold my words in
Gentle manner
Give my pattern
To the rain soaked earth,
Lead me to the edge
Of the sea
And let me read aloud
My soul
========================================

you already have...many a time..in every whisper of your muse...every ramble...every soft spoken dream set to verse....
and I am grateful to get to read them...and warm in their heart-light.

mothy me

Of all the things in me I could never be,
of the true I kept hidden from view,
the best parts of my heart ...
were the ones touched by you.

jm

rosepetals25

Member Elite

since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

7 posted 2002-03-25 10:16 PM

Lauren,

Wow. This has to be one of the best writings I have ever read here. I can't tell you how much I love this.

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
- Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

8 posted 2002-03-25 10:23 PM

Lauren, this is incredible. I feel the same, and you said it so well.
Sandra

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

9 posted 2002-03-25 10:26 PM

It must have been one of those days, for I had read this the day it was posted, and where is my response? I ask you, where is it! Ah, interruptions! Silly, silly interruptions....

Thank You for this!

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

10 posted 2002-03-25 11:04 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwwwww, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your gorgeous rambles always touch my heart and you always share such magic with your words! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, I love this series! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

11 posted 2002-03-25 11:08 PM

Lyra~

Thank you, I always enjoy your comments...they mean much to me!!

HUGSSS

~~

Marge~

Oh I am so glad you liked that line, its a favorite though of mine as well...thank you sweet lady...HUGSSS

~~

~V~

always so good to see your smile here, thank you....

HUGSSS

~~

Larry~

I have a long way to go....in my wandering...but I will rest...and it will be grand! thank you sweet friend~ HUGSSS

~~
Barry~

thank you for letting me know, its always so encouraging to hear that....

Greeneyes~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (03-25-2002 11:08 PM).]

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

12 posted 2002-03-25 11:14 PM

Janet Marie~

I keep reading aloud and sometimes, I find I need to restart my words...thank you so much for being you...always....

HUGSSS

~~

Tara~

thats such a kind compliment, thank you....it touches me more then you know...

HUGSSS

~~

Sandra~

I am so glad you could relate to this, thank you for letting me know..Peace to you...HUGSSS

~~

Sunshine~

LOL I have never posted this before, or did I miss the jist of that?? I love your replies..they make one think....be gentle I am legally blondeeee (spelled wrong on purpose

) thanks! HUGSSS

~~

Noah~

you snuck in on me...*l* I love your vibrant replies and soft heart....thank you~ HUGSSS

Greeneyes~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (03-25-2002 11:15 PM).]

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

13 posted 2002-03-25 11:25 PM

Lauren~ There is so much to like about this.
You speak so gracefully and with such a tender heart.
Be well Lauren and chin up dear girl.

I really loved this!!

ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

14 posted 2002-03-25 11:42 PM

This equals the beauty behind such a mask ...
a picture forged and coloured by your own soul.

If you re-read and find new words to speak, than by all means, please continue rambling!!

I listen above the calmness of time's tide for you to begin.

skyshine

Member Elite

since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

15 posted 2002-03-25 11:52 PM

This is very well done!

sky

I'm in charge, and I say question authority!

Ivy Rose
Senior Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 1300
MA, USA

16 posted 2002-03-26 12:17 PM

Greeneyes...This poem is definitely a thing of beauty, an aria for the soul. Just Beautiful!!! ***Ivy Rose

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

17 posted 2002-03-26 12:40 PM

This is stunningly beautiful Lauren. The lyrical quality is outstanding. Your opening notes are exquisite. Another one into my favorites library.

"And I fell into place
Trusting the journey
Where poetry lives
Among shadows,
Winds of time no longer blow softly"

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

18 posted 2002-03-26 03:11 PM

"let me read aloud my soul. . . "

yes. . . that line is the best I feel. . . for when the soul is read, the heart is seen. . .

I love these "rambles" of yours Lauren. . . you really reach your best in them. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

19 posted 2002-03-26 06:12 PM

I'm keeping this one, Lauren. I love it!

*hugs*

Michael

Stars will shine when I am gone
Earth will spin on as before
Gulls still race along the shore
Morning star, still kiss the dawn

~ M. Auguste

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

20 posted 2002-03-27 06:02 PM

Love to you all, thank you for taking time to post your thoughts and kind comments...I appreciate you all...

Love to all

Lauren~

~Greeneyes~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into th

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