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Sunshine
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0 posted 2002-02-16 09:46 AM



Point...........Counterpoint
for the Professor

I am your full...........you are my drink
Where the light shines.............the shades are drawn
You need my up............so I can come down
I will walk for you..............while you allow me to sit
I shall write the book............you shall fold the page
You will not weigh me down..........I shall not let you frown
We need ying and yang of two..........for one cannot go it alone
I am your full............you are my drink
I am the ripple...........to your throw of stone
I am the glass tinkling............when the rock hits it mark
I can be the lightning...........to have you see the spark
You shall be my night............so I may have my rest
You may be my chill.............so I may snuggle close
You may be my write..............so I can read worthwhile
May I then be your write..............so that I may see you smile


~*~

©Karilea Rilling Jungel
16 February 2002

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (02-16-2002 12:24 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-02-16 11:48 AM


"I am the rippleto your throw of stone"


(love that line)

very cool poem! I like it very much

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2 posted 2002-02-16 11:53 AM


Sunshine,
This got me to smile.

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3 posted 2002-02-16 12:35 PM


a spiritually awesome balance of beauty!
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4 posted 2002-02-16 12:41 PM




BRAVO!!! Ooohhhhhhhh...I love it, this is marvelous, I love the cause-and-effect feel of it, or as if you were talking to your professor and wondering what he was thinking of you as a wonderful writer! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is a true timeless keeper! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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5 posted 2002-02-16 12:51 PM


BRAVO!!!Outstanding...this is a magnificent piece of writing. Stunning. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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6 posted 2002-02-16 01:19 PM


I love this, Kari, and I'm sure the good professor will too!

A creative format that reminded me a bit of the kabbalah tree of life, something I've been wanting to try, myself. (We do seem to be riding the same wavelength of late! )

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7 posted 2002-02-16 01:26 PM


Love it Karilea!!  This type of presentation I have seen before, and have been tempted to try something like it.  Enjoyed, as I know the Professor will as well.
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me~

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8 posted 2002-02-16 02:14 PM


You are my up when I am down.
You make me smile when I'd rather frown.
Are we surfing similar waves again?

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9 posted 2002-02-24 02:44 AM


EXCELLENT and it's a keepsake in my library SweetPoetFriend...
I luved the flow the expression the presentation heck, the whole kitNkaboodle...
BigHugs2u
*~coco~*

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10 posted 2002-02-24 02:50 AM



Karilea-
Beautifully penned thoughts.
I enjoyed this very much.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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11 posted 2002-02-24 08:05 AM


You may be my chill.............so I may snuggle close

smiling smiling

Kethry
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12 posted 2002-02-24 08:30 AM


Sunshine,
a beautifully balanced poem. It took the scales away from my eyes.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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13 posted 2002-02-24 09:19 AM


I love the way you played with this.
Peaches

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14 posted 2002-02-24 10:55 AM


This was neat. I haven't seen one of these before, and I really like the way it reads.

Nan

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15 posted 2002-02-24 11:19 AM


Karilea

Without the dark, would we understand the light?...how beautifully you have shown the way of each.  Hugs!

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