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Yu Lan
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0 posted 11-19-2001 02:16 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Yu Lan

Television

Ten o’clock at night
alone in the house of her parents…
Footsteps… breathing!
White knuckles squeeze grey
as she shrinks in her chair,
afraid to check the locks.
Heh, my English teacher didn't understand the connection between the title and the poem.. is he just dopey, or is it really that unclear..??
-Lynne

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© Copyright 2001 Lynne Miura, née Chudley - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 12-18-2001 02:52 AM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

the personna was watching a horror show on tv?

good to see your stuff, Lynne
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2 posted 12-18-2001 09:29 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I got it!!  
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Smiling..this reminded me of something. During Hurricane Andrew, I lost power in my home. I turned on the radio to hear an interview with a man who had also lost power and was talking to a radio journalist. When asked what he was doing at that moment, I had to laugh at his reply that he was sitting in his hallway reading "The Exorcist" by candlelight. Grin, now how masochistic is THAT?

Enjoyed your poem, Yu Lan. Good to see you here!
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4 posted 12-18-2001 04:25 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

It's as clear as it need be... you are a wiz with titles, Yu.     I always love your titles!

This poem's simple, and that's fine... there wasn't a lot of advanced technique present.  But I understand and appreciate that it's the simplicity of the poem, combined with that of the title, that gives the desired effect.  I could take this entire poem symbolically, couldn't I...?     What we see in what wins our attention seeps into the background, to the point where we are deluded.  Some fantasy that we enact or experience, or in the case of television, observe, might become so distinct to us that we associate it to our surroundings... we make real the things of fiction.

Television is a great title for this poem, because it's the example being explored.  It also puts the appropriate scene into the reader's mind when they begin the poem.  I pictured a girl sitting there over her buttered popcorn, staring into the television nervously.

Great work, Yu... I'm glad to be reading from you again...

Lots of love,
~Allan

Yu Lan
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5 posted 12-18-2001 11:42 PM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

Woops, I just ran my message onto the end of the poem, that was brilliant..

Faterider.. um, not quite.. it is more like the others said, like that because she has watched television so often, and seen horrible things happening to people in their own homes, in the dark, alone, she is scared, relating it to her own situation. ^_^

Thank you all heapsly.

love and Christmas wishes, -Lynne

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Wow, not bad. Dont see you making an appearance in this forum often now, Yu. Cg.

- James
The beauty of nature is displayed,
not through itself,
but through the creatures
dwelling within its bosom.


Yu Lan
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7 posted 01-05-2002 04:49 PM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

Thanks James..
I know.. I don't get much chance to come here as often now.. heh, feel kinda on the sidelines now 'coz I haven't been here for so long! ^_^

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