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Magnus
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0 posted 2001-11-14 04:18 PM


Without you I feel like a rough grain of sand
A mere speck of silicone lying alone, yearning
waiting for love to again sweep me gently away
Without your presence,  this fragile grain is lost.

I daydream of your closeness,  your scent.
My open hand slowly brushing your hair.
My fingers tracing your curves ever lightly.
Your flesh responding to me, tensing.

I touch your toes, one by one in my mind.
My hands warm your calves and beyond
Blowing softly in your ear, you squirm
A sigh escapes soft lips, slightly parted.

Without this moment of dreams, touches
my mind would waste in my emptiness.
Lost  soul and heart would falter and fail.
My lips silenced, can answer only to you.

Keep me with you along crystal streams
into the regions of your sacred dreams.
Let me hold and kiss you in waning light.
For I hunger to see you this lonesome night.

© Copyright 2001 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
Enchantress
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1 posted 2001-11-14 04:27 PM


Keep me with you along crystal streams
into the regions of your sacred dreams.
Let me hold and kiss you in waning light.
For I hunger to see you this lonesome night.
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OH Magnus!  I haven't even had dinner yet and you have me sighing and swooning all over the place!  I'll go put the coffee on.  Um, did I say I really enjoyed this?  Well, I sure did!!  Can't you tell by the smile on my face?     ~hugs, Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

Magnus
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2 posted 2001-11-14 04:30 PM


Oh yes I can Nancy....and yes...put the coffee on....thanx...
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3 posted 2001-11-14 05:16 PM


I know this feeling...  We are left to wonder if they can feel it when we think of them...  (I believe they can).  This was a zephyr of thought in a universal field of reads.  Nice work, Magnus.

-MVS

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4 posted 2001-11-14 07:03 PM


Oh I think this is perfect, so much happening. Lost in dreams we must be, cause reality is not so good.
Sandra

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5 posted 2001-11-14 07:36 PM


very sorrowful, Magnus, very reflective piece.

Kathleen
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6 posted 2001-11-14 07:52 PM


yes. . .there's a deep feeling of loss here. . . just reaches out and grabs you. . .

well done. . .

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7 posted 2001-11-14 11:50 PM


I agree with Enchantress..I love the last stanza! Magnus, you are a very talented writer. Honestly, you are an inspiration to me.

Love,
RP

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8 posted 2001-11-15 01:42 AM


You speak well of a yearning soul, looking to be fulfilled.  I enjoyed this very much Magnus.

~*~  Carpe' Diem  ~*~

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9 posted 2001-11-15 04:30 AM


Liked this Magnus....James
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10 posted 2001-11-15 07:47 AM


Keep me with you along crystal streams
into the regions of your sacred dreams.
Let me hold and kiss you in waning light.
For I hunger to see you this lonesome night.


What an afterthought!!!innerthought!!! present fantasy!!! Superb verse and this stanza is so enticing even to a stranger.

Sincerely,
Regina

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Except for what's in the heart.
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Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 2001-11-15 08:21 AM


Magnus,
Keep me with you along crystal streams
into the regions of your sacred dreams.
These line are worth saving. Enjoyed

Charisma
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12 posted 2001-11-15 05:56 PM


~Keep me with you along crystal streams
into the regions of your sacred dreams.
Let me hold and kiss you in waning light.
For I hunger to see you this lonesome night.~

Yes me too, love these fabulous piece, and the last stanza is really beautiful.
Excellent done!

Charisma ~*TMP*~

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13 posted 2001-11-15 06:01 PM


*sigh* Absolutely breathtaking. You show such emotion in your writing that I am always amazed by your talent. I love it.  **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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