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Bitter Moon
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Bitter Moon |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT 
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Bitter Moon Where once heavens light severed the joyous night reflecting the hearts of the day Now shines the bitter moon where stars could once bloom to show true love its way We stumble, as it starts we fall breaking hearts searching shelter from the storms As darkness fills the air day and night unable to share of that which the bitterness forms Why must it be this way only hearing what the moon has to say the raining pain accross its face Why can't we move on begin again, let things be gone putting the past in its place Some yearn for the star-filled sky room to breath, an answer why Is that to much to ask? Instead hearts can be found scattered relentlessly about the ground under the bitter moon they bask |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Beautifully written bitter words under the moon, well said.. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hearts scattered relentlessly on the ground. Wow, I should have said that..  Sandra [This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 11-14-2001).] |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Magnus - Thank you, friend, beautifully written words from beyond a bitter moon. Sandra - Sometimes a relentless heart holds undying love. It takes time and patience to remove the bitterness. Thank you for your kindness!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Why must it be this way only hearing what the moon has to say the raining pain accross its face Why can't we move on begin again, let things be gone putting the past in its place Some yearn for the star-filled sky room to breath, an answer why Is that to much to ask? Instead hearts can be found scattered relentlessly about the ground under the bitter moon they bask ===================================== This is excellent.... I love this rhyme scheme...very cool...was a pleasure to read aloud... and the stark imagery is tied up with the haunting ache of the emotions. This is a melancholy beauty... very well done poet sir. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Beautifully bitter. Your able to touch the heart of the reader and let them feel the bitterness of this moon. Soon it will be a sweet moon of romance...I hope, my friend. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Where once heavens light severed the joyous night reflecting the hearts of the day Now shines the bitter moon where stars could once bloom to show true love its way" I LOVE THIS STANZA...THE FEELING IT GAVE ME WHEN READING IT ...YOU HAVE A WAY WITH WORDS MY FRIEND. I CANT WAIT TO READ MORE OF YOUR WORK, IM SERIOUS!!! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
it takes time and patience to remove the bitterness...you are indeed very smart *s...if you told me this a year ago I would have lost my patience with you and told you where you could stick the time... hmmmmmm hope I don't sound too bitter at the moment..'cause this is now and not then (Hugs) nice to see a face...but an eye view would have been nice too. ~Wynter "For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
this is beautiful! Kathleen |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
JM - thank you for the excellent comment. Karen - yes indeed ... bittersweet! RP - Hi Serious ..., I'm Ct. Thanks for the kind word. Maureen - A year ago I would have probably shown you where ... I didn't have much patience either. As for the eyes ... I will see what I can do. Kay - As always your comments are like a breath of fresh air. Thank you for sharing!! |
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