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Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

0 posted 2001-09-18 07:40 PM

Traveler Ending

There was a tremor of hope along a road of solitude
But she moved too fast.
She scared it away.
The path grew long, her feet calloused
Her mind turned to the peace of things passing by
And her love drifted just along beside her.
It drifted in her blind spot.
She thought it had abandoned her.
Now she remains cursed by her blind spot.
Won't you take her heart and pry it open?
The dust of years lies thickly,
Blocking the once vibrant light.
There was a tremor of hope along a blind spot in the road of solitude.
She went looking for it.
It had been hers all along.

Don't gain my affections then cover my eyes. Don't sweep me off my feet then fail to catch me before I hit the floor.

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

1 posted 2001-09-18 07:59 PM

you know. . . it's amazing what can come out of our minds when we're not trying. . .

great job. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Moonlight Romeo

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since 2001-09-10

Posts 982
The heart of you

2 posted 2001-09-18 08:26 PM

I have a notebook like this. Perhaps I should go into it more.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

3 posted 2001-09-18 08:36 PM

Notebook stuff is good stuff indeed...

Suzanne Arlene
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 377
Ontario, Canada

4 posted 2001-09-18 08:55 PM

Oh i liked that. It makes me look at my blindspot lol. Is something there i did not see before .hmmmmm

Suzanne

Pip
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since 2001-09-14

Posts 59

5 posted 2001-09-18 09:17 PM

Found yer notebook did ya? LOL! LOL! LOL!

I know a secret, and I think it's funny.....

Masked Intruder

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since 1999-05-23

Posts 1231
Near golden sunsets

6 posted 2001-09-18 09:21 PM

Jenn, I do believe I love this poem! I absolutely adore the images it created and the places it took me! My favorite line: "It drifted in her blind spot. She thought it had abandoned her." This thought stands out and will stick with me, very much so! Great write!

You can't wake a person who is pretending to be asleep. -- Navajo Proverb

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2001-09-18 10:10 PM

This was very much enjoyed tonight...thank you!!

~Time has cast a spell on you
so you won't ever forget me~

Alan
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since 2000-09-12

Posts 1499
right next door

8 posted 2001-09-18 11:28 PM

Temptress...I really like this. I can't pick a line that I like better than the others. It all fit together perfectly
alan

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

9 posted 2001-09-18 11:37 PM

Thank God for those roadside rest areas. Enjoyed.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

10 posted 2001-09-19 04:04 AM

TemptyOne~

'Her mind turned to the peace of things passing by
And her love drifted just along beside her.'

I enjoyed the thoughts in these lines~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Dee
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

11 posted 2001-09-19 04:33 AM

Jenn, your notebook must be amazing. Mine just ends up being full of to do lists and stuff. I really enjoyed this, a powerful peice.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand

Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

12 posted 2001-09-20 02:56 PM

Jennifer,

Your writing always fascinates me. Nice work!

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

Apachecat906
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since 2001-09-04

Posts 217
Michigan, USA

13 posted 2001-09-20 03:45 PM

Her mind turned to the peace of things passing by
And her love drifted just along beside her.
It drifted in her blind spot.
She thought it had abandoned her.
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This part was absolutley great..very thought provoking. I wish you would post more from your notebook, if this is the kind of "scribblings" you are inclined to put in there!

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

14 posted 2001-09-23 04:05 PM

Temptress-
   Much enjoyed these thoughts.
   Nicely done.
   Hugs,
   ~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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