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Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

0 posted 2001-08-12 02:18 AM

There’s a young man playing piano quietly
towards the back of the room.

I strain to hear the melody
knowing if I can string the notes together
if only in my mind
our dance will begin
again.

[This message has been edited by Duncan (edited 08-12-2001).]

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

1 posted 2001-08-12 02:39 AM

:::sigh:::
I've done my own share
of note stringing...
I really like this.

snow

"Trace my body with your words
and in doing so, you touch my heart"
Snow

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-08-12 08:18 AM

Duncan, these snippets of poetic lines leave much to the imagination...I am enjoying them immensely!

poetsguild
Member

since 2001-08-12

Posts 85
Florida

3 posted 2001-08-12 09:02 AM

Like something just out of reach - the strophes cast a promising spell.

Has an Eliot-ish feel to it. Nice, Duncan.

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

4 posted 2001-08-12 11:16 PM

I love this!

*smiles*

~Tier

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

5 posted 2001-08-12 11:18 PM

Duncan
This was really beautiful and so romantic.
Take care....Sue

Suetang

MoonShadow
Senior Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 943
Dark side of the Moon.

6 posted 2001-08-13 12:12 PM

Powerful piece that provokes the mind to remember and the heart to feel. Nice going.

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

7 posted 2001-08-14 10:54 AM

enjoy

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2001-08-14 11:18 AM

yes.. this is nicely done. It is crafted in such a way to leave much to the reader..and yet says a great deal...

good work here!!!!

cpalmer
Senior Member

since 2001-06-26

Posts 977
Phoenix, Az

9 posted 2001-08-14 12:25 PM

I love this! so much said in a few short words! beautiful!

Cindi

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

10 posted 2001-08-14 12:45 PM

........wow........love how you do that

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

11 posted 2001-08-14 02:44 PM

Simply put and emotionally packed!
Sandra

MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

12 posted 2001-08-14 02:47 PM

I enjoyed it.....
Few words......and just leave so many possibilities behind them.....

Thank you
***************************

"Oh...me!Oh Life!
Of the questions of these recurring..........
Of myself forever reproaching myself,
for who more foolish than I......"
~Whitman~

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

13 posted 2001-08-14 02:59 PM

very nice, I like this...hadn't read you before, course I don't get to be around much, will try to look for more of yours

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