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MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

0 posted 2001-07-31 12:10 PM

~~~ In the heart of her ~~~

She……
She…..
And
She…….
Oh……
How many times would
he repeat it?
How many times
would he breathe in
and out her name
then forever in…
inside of him…

She sits before him
And he is there
And yet not there
Somewhere
Between her
And her

She inhales the air
And he feels
As if she is inhaling
Some part of him
Keeps it locked within her
And he feels as if he is there
There
Inside
In the pounding heart of her
But lost
Not knowing where
This artery leads
Where does that vein go.

Oh…he wishes
There would be
Some directions there
To label each part of the heart
Each room
Each artery
Each turning
So he’d be able to search
For the biggest
And
The most important room
Of her heart
And writes his name there
Paint his picture
Forever kept on the walls
Of her heart
But no….no…
He’d paint
on every room
every wall
of that precious heart of her
So she would have him
Wherever she goes
Remembers him
With every beat of her heart
And he’d watch her heart through that
Painting
Which is part and yet all of him
And which would come alive
With every beat of her heart

The clock ticks….
And she exhales
And….
Ahhhhh
Is she exhaling
The part of him
He left there?
Would she exhale him
As simply as
She drew him in with an inhaling breath?
How long would she let him be
Inside her chest
The fraction of the second, between two breaths?
Between heartbeats?

Yes….
Let her exhale him
Let her

But….
How could she not
How could she not exhale the air
She drew in?
How long could she
Hold her breath and keep him there?

Oh…..
What an agony
To know his staying there with the air
She took in
Would mean
The loss of
Her…..
Would he endure it?

He returned back
Along the arteries of her
Walked along the corridors
Of her heart
Back to the room
Where he left his name
His picture
And the heart of him
Looking at the name drawn
With ink of his blood
On the walls
Feeling the shivering beats
Of her heart
The ebbing tide
Of blood
In her
He sighed
In relief
He has written the name
Painted the picture
With his own blood
And
Thank God!
He has never engraved it
Though he has always
Dreamed of that
But
No….
He would never
Never have the heart
To hurt the precious
Walls of the heart of her.

He silently wiped the name
And the painting
Though it burned him so
To wipe his own blood
With his own tears

He turned his back
Went
Leaving behind
The heart of him
A guardian
To keep her heart safe
And make sure it would never
Be scratched
Never bleed
He left
The heart of him
that say

along the way

He waited
waited
For her next exhaling breath
To be carried with the waft of air
Out

He checked his watch
Oh….
It’s time for the next breath
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Thank you
*********************

It's only me.......only me
I hope that would suffice eternally

{{to cross a sea of wonder, and hold close at heart all dreams}}

[This message has been edited by MyEnchanted_Melody (edited 07-31-2001).]

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

1 posted 2001-07-31 12:16 PM

Wow - so lovely with a creative and effective presentation. I really enjoy the way you write

Well done!

Melissa~

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2001-07-31 07:57 AM

She sits before him
And he is there
And yet not there
Somewhere
Between her
And her
tough place to be....

enjoyed this a great deal..the image is strong, the story well told and the feelings palpable...

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

3 posted 2001-07-31 10:03 AM

Wonderful, much enjoyed your story. Very strong feeling come through on both parts here. Makes you wonder if he is really there, or just in her dreams, or in another parallel universe.
Beautiful
Sandra

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

4 posted 2001-07-31 10:17 AM

I don't usually comment on long poems yet this is the second one this week. Maybe my attention span is growing?
I liked the theme and believe you have inspired a somewhat shorter effort from me

Thank you.

Finally fixed :)
http://members.home.net/excalibur2501/Interloper.htm

MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

5 posted 2001-07-31 11:23 AM

~Melissa~

I'm really glad that you have enjoyed it...

Thank you dearly
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~Cpat hair~ Ron

Oh.....yes....perhaps a tough place to be...I'd rather not be there..

Thank you for reading and for the nice comment....
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~Sandra~

I'm glad you have enjoyed it....
Where is he indeed?.....perhaps somewhere
between his dreams and his thoughts....

*************************
~Interloper~

Wow....it thrills me that you can be inspired by a piece of mine....I'll read yours.

Thank you for reading and your comment....
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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2001-07-31 11:31 AM

She sits before him
And he is there
And yet not there
Somewhere
Between her
And her
fearful of letting go
tearful of the leaving

She sits
waiting to be the one
knowing the other
will always shadow him
at turns of light phrase
and twists of dark regretShe

sits before him
And he is there
And yet not there

Hope you don't mind.... if so please let me know and I'll edit this... it just took me here...and I did not write it any place but here..

MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

7 posted 2001-07-31 11:41 AM

Oh.....~Ron~.....I won't mind it
never Ron.....

I loved it....it sheds light on the other part...(her).

You have a total freedom dear friend....
and to tell the truth, it makes me so happy when I find that I have in some way inspired people to reply or write.....

So.....a big thank you for that...

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Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

8 posted 2001-07-31 07:13 PM

I would say that to know your heart is to understand much. . . just as to know our own heart is the same. . .

This work is just excellent. . . you have the ability to take the reader to places not yet known. . . the flow of your words is excellent, and the images that you show are totally full and vibrant. . .

You know, I'm running out of words to describe your writing my friend. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

9 posted 2001-07-31 08:37 PM

this is exciting and special!

MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

10 posted 2001-08-01 09:51 AM

Dear ~Sven~

Oh......dear......I don't know how to thank you.
Knowing your poetry and your wonderful touch.....I feel happy when I know that you like my poetry. So thank you my friend again and again....from my heart .....

Would there ever be a chance for one to know his own heart completely?.....
I have always thought that the map of the human heart is a lost one.....

Thank you
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

~Irish Rose~

Thank you dearly....I am certainly glad that you have liked it.....

Thank you
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MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

11 posted 2001-08-03 02:44 PM

Definitely a unique presentation and journey. Many possible conclusions (or are they conclusions? Perceptions, perhaps, would be a better word...)

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

12 posted 2001-08-03 11:23 PM

Dear Mark......

Your own unique perception shines through....

Thank you dearly for always seeing through.....and reading......
It always makes me happy.....

Thank you
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[This message has been edited by MyEnchanted_Melody (edited 08-03-2001).]

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

13 posted 2001-08-04 01:54 AM

Enchanted

Sad... Haunting
Great

Thank You
~~~Connie~~~

MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

14 posted 2001-08-04 02:31 AM

~Zinsser~

Thank you for reading......and for the nice comment

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taramw
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 738

15 posted 2001-08-04 08:08 AM

I don't ordinarily like longish poems - but I ADORED this one!

Written exceptionally well. Enjoyed immensely!!

MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

16 posted 2001-08-04 04:02 PM

~taramw~

I'm really glad that you enjoyed my poem.... and it proved to be worth the long journey of it.....

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