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Who Is Me?
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Who Is Me? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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So many said: "You should get out," as the nails were pounded. Too deep, to ever be removed-- I tried...I tried... rage, compounded within padlock's circumstance painted in a corner, dry... By my own deft-handed loose-- left with me- no path to choose... every choice haunted by "why..." with every tear a fear untried. "Listen...whisper..." Pass again. Verbiage of sacred friend... Dancing shadows drift pass me-- a shadow wonders: "Who is me?" |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
It is beautiful serenity..  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
as the nails were pounded. Too deep, to ever be removed-- I tried...I tried... rage, compounded within padlock's circumstance painted in a corner, dry... By my own deft-handed loose-- left with me- no path to choose... every choice haunted by "why..." with every tear a fear untried. =================================== Ive lost track, is it my turn to clean the mirrors?...ack, leave em streaked.... dont recognize the reflection anyway, right? If its any consolation, I dont believe it will always be this way, time eventually brings choices..... "well I been afraid of changing cause I built my life around you ... but time makes you bolder...even children get older... and I'm getting older too" .... Landslide Fleetwood Mac When your own emptiness is all thats getting through |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
softly softly says K Here for you dear... hugs  KI am a refugee of logic...insisting |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
If you are going to strike, strike hard... well done, Serene one...very well done... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Very well said and done... a pleasure as usual...  [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (edited 07-19-2001).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Seren. if you need some one to dig an escape tunnel call me Powerful words, take care, ok. |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Serenity...you have echoed my thoughts with this one in such a beautiful way. Hugs, ~Krista |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Nicely written, powerful poem. Do not fear going forward slowly, |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Such turmoil within this. "every choice haunted by "why..." with every tear a fear untried." Sure do know what you mean. You did this so well. Sandra |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity: "painted in a corner, dry... By my own deft-handed loose-- left with me- no path to choose..." If you walk across the wet pain you will make a path that is filled with your own footprints. Very emotive writing and well done! |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Who is me? well, I think one with strength, one very talented..one that will continue walking the pathway and walking it well..very gentle smile |
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Flutterwings Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 288Maine |
A very strong ending.... An exquisite read. Bravo!  ((~.~)) |
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