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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2001-07-12 08:51 AM

Drenched by the
Tears you cry,
But unable to stop the flow,
I tried to remember
The light that fell from
Your eyes…

Once upon a time…

How can this ache
That rattles like thunder
Through your heart,
Be salved by the promise
Of rainbows
Or memories
of sunshine?

I can not turn back the
Roiling clouds, or
Blow away the storms
That roll through
The empty plains
Of your soul.

I can only offer
The shelter of my arms,
As temporary relief
From tornadic emotions
And sleepless nights
Spent waiting alone.

Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

1 posted 2001-07-12 08:54 AM

this touches me on several levels....and I enjoyed them all....

thank you.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2001-07-12 08:55 AM

Cpat Hair,
Well that's something. Enjoyed the read.

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

3 posted 2001-07-12 08:55 AM

I like the way you represented the comfort of friendship through the metaphor of weather. Nicely portrayed.

-MVS

"If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn."

"Everyone can hear; few can listen."

Rick
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

4 posted 2001-07-12 09:02 AM

A lovely feeling, affectionate, caring poem of love and its ups and downs. You caring for the one that life has hurt and offering your arms as a place of warmth to hide and find the sunshine of a new day.

Nice read, great work.

Rick

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2001-07-12 09:07 AM

lady.. anytime ones words touch another...the author is well rewarded

Seymour...yes it is something... thanks for reading

Mark.. being simple minded like I am..metaphors just help me understand..
thanks for your many comments...

Rick.. Thank You Sir... I do appreciate the comment!!

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

6 posted 2001-07-12 10:56 AM

I'll take it, I'll take it!!!!!

This is a wonderful piece with an offer of wonderful friendship/caring. Well done!!!

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