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peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

0 posted 2002-04-26 09:23 PM

*I'm not sure why I wrote this poem..I just started writing and ended up with this! Tell me what ya think!*

You were my first love,
To me you are like a flying dove,
You soar past the rest and up above.

On a bad day you make me happy,
Sorry, if this sounds too sappy!

There's no price to pay.
I'm not sure what to say,
But, you'll see one day

How much you really mean to me,
You'll just have to wait and see!

*-LiFe TaKeZ uR DrEaMz aNd TuRnZ tHeM uPsIdE dOwN..FrIeNdZ TaLk AbOuT U WhEn uR nOT aRoUnD..PeOpLe MaKe PrOmIsEz THeY JuST CaN'T KeEp..& i'Ve cOmE tO

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

1 posted 2002-04-26 11:37 PM

wow jess, wut brought this about?? i lliked it yes, but theres more behind it...tell me if u want 2,u know i'm always here 2 talk if u EVER need me...

~if you want me to fall for you, you gotta give me something worth tripping over~

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2002-04-27 12:21 PM

I can definately see a follow up of a more in depth piece..i liked it a lot!!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

Sabriel.s.h.lover
Member

since 2001-04-16

Posts 73
b.f.e. aka- Hickville

3 posted 2002-04-27 12:48 PM

jessibaca...i like your poem alot. oh, by the way...this is fshmegan. thats basically all i had to say...i like it. foodbye

~U broke my heart once, and u'll break it agen, but its worth all my heart-breakin, 2 be more than ur friend.~

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

4 posted 2002-04-27 12:52 PM

Very nicely written.

Jenn

"I can't get you out of my head- your love is all I think about."

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

5 posted 2002-04-27 08:36 PM

How sweet and romantic.

I really like the bouncy and airy feel to it. Very sweet and happy... energetic and hopeful. You put it [the feelings] nicely into a poem. And though it was a bit short for what I usually see, it really worked for this one. Nicely done.

Sincerely,
Titus

Every second that passes you are one second older. You'll never get that second back.

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