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NathanS Member
since 2001-09-27
Posts 106CA |
Don't know if i posted this before, i wrote it a few weaks back but didnt like it and was cleaning out my poetry folder... i thought i'd share it anyhow. Not expecting comments. Titled: Raining In the raining nights Do the drops descend to the ground with such a pace. In the raining days Do the skies cloud over, and bring darkness not peace. In the raining evening Do the winds cryout with longing emotion wishing to release. In the raining morning Do the puddles splash with such excitement its a happy place. -Dreys |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very well done poem, i'm impressed thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I echo Acire. I liked this.  Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Beautiful, I loved all the different kinds of rainfall described.....especially the last verse. You have some wonderful talent, keep up the wonderful writing!  *Krista Knutson* |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Dreys: Your title caught my eye...I wonder how that happened, ne? ^_^ I really thought this was well done. The different ways you expressed when it rained, and the moods that came with them were very appropriate. Don'tcha just love rain? ^_^; The flow was also great. Very...err...liquifying. *needs to get a new thesaurus* o_O; Matched the title very well. The tone was awesome, the way you changed from light to dark to light again. The ending was nice and happy, which was quite good because RAIN ISN'T BAD. *not making any sense here...ignore me* Keep up the good stuff! ++ Leah ++ Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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NathanS Member
since 2001-09-27
Posts 106CA |
Thanks, i appreciate the post. I personally don't mind rain, however, a close friend of mine likes it a lot. So this poem was kind of dedicated to her. -Dreys |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Maybe you should show her the poem  là où est mon amour? |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this is a beautiful poem...the imagery and emotion was...nicely expressed, togetehr. I liked..."In the raining evening Do the winds cryout with longing emotion wishing to release." sometimes even though your wind [sighs?] it still feels like you cant release the pain from which you started crying. nice. okay, im confusing myself [again]  Hey...#25437 |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I've never thought of rain with so much thought before until i read your poem. Truly made me think and want to pay more attention to the simple things in life im too careless to notice Thank you for that ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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prov1717 Member
since 2001-12-26
Posts 74NE |
thank you for deciding to post this, i loved it. this is the first piece of yours i've read and i look forward to seeing more. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I love the rain. *sigh* Rainy days are so... beautiful! Heh, this is a beautiful piece. Thanks for sharing it with us... I hope I get to read more soon. Nice work, Nathan. --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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