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Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

0 posted 2001-11-22 09:01 PM

I’m sitting here upon my bed,
Rocking back and forth,
Waiting to see what I will do,
To see how I’ll judge my worth.

Huddled in my own little world,
I’m blinded by my dreams,
Kept from completing the goals I’ve set,
Cause I’ve set no goals for me, it seems.

Like a shattered little mirror,
The picture’s so unclear,
Who’s to say I’m really alive,
When my screams they can’t seem to hear?

Shaking from all the strain they’ve placed,
I feel about to break,
Falling to my knees again,
My head begins to ache.

Pounding wounds upon my mind,
They don’t know who they hurt,
Cause I’m just a little boy,
Getting kicked into the dirt.

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Definitely not my best...but it's a start on the road out of Writer's Blockville.

"Diplomacy is the art of saying 'Nice Doggy' while you search for a rock." - Will Rogers

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-11-22 10:19 PM

I can honestly say you're out of that town! And mighty fast! Dude, this is good! Don't evern think otherwise!

"Fighting was the only thing I was good at...but I at least I always fought for what I beleived in..."

Jessica

Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

2 posted 2001-11-23 12:59 PM

Adam...
Once again... Talented work. I helped you out of the block cause if I hadn't of mentioned it I don't think you would even have tried to write. I could be wrong though! I hope to see more soon... You know I enjoy reading your poetry. Love you, Bro!!

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

3 posted 2001-12-24 01:26 AM

Chilling, dark....I love it.
Very kick arse write you have her...*Pops you for fishing for compliments with you..."it isn't my best" BS* HeHeHe...Seriously though, very dark, very "out there" and "laying it on the line"...I like that about poetry.

"I'd rather die purposely alone than to have lived an accidental life of solitude."- Jesa "§ùgã®" Thompson

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

4 posted 2001-12-24 10:44 AM

Ick..you must be kidding me Spice. This is definitely not one of my best. I hate this poem..the flow is off all throughout the poem.

-Kosetsu

"I like pigs. Dogs look up at us. Cats look down on us. Pigs treat us as equals." - Winston Churchill

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

5 posted 2001-12-24 10:59 AM

Great read Kos!!! I enjoyed this a lot!

"Who’s to say I’m really alive,
When my screams they can’t seem to hear?"

I love those lines...i wonder...

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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