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Something I've Got To Say
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Something I've Got To Say |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
You already know how I feel, I’ve said it countless times before, I don’t care what it takes, But I can’t take this anymore. I need you in my life, And as hard as I can try, I can’t seem to make you see, How it hurts with each goodbye. I know you’ve said that you’re afraid, But I’m as scared as you, I’m scared I’m driving you away, Please tell me what to do. I wish I just knew how you felt, But everytime I watch your eyes, You always seem to turn away, As if to hide in some disguise. I don’t want to pressure you, But I have to know, Is there something I’m not doing right, Is there some other love I should show? I can’t promise that we won’t get hurt, But there’s something I’ve got to say, Whether or not you change your mind, I love you in every little way. "Diplomacy is the art of saying 'Nice Doggy' while you search for a rock." - Will Rogers |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
You already know I like this one, and I'm pretty sure it will help convince Rissa too. Good luck, though I'm sure you won't need it. Time and patience my dear. Like they say, all things that are worth the time, usually take just that to get them. Take care, keep writing. Good job. Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
AWESOME adamz! you know i like this one lots already....a job very well done!  i enjoyed this one heaps...and heaps..  and im sure shell like this one very much too! keep them coming , poet... |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Aw, doesn't communications breakdowns suck? Just keep tryin, hun, that's all I can say. Great poem... maybe try letting her read this... Just a thought! ~I am a computer genius... Hey! How do you turn this thing on?!? |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
I intend to read it to her myself...thanks for the comments. -Adam "Diplomacy is the art of saying 'Nice Doggy' while you search for a rock." - Will Rogers |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
eek..i just went through this...but i was on the girl's side. its tough..bigtime. there really arent any words to describe the emotions you go through in a situation like this. this was great..i think i'll print it out just for the memory. wonderful *dq **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Im in the same exact situation right now w/my boyfriend...::hugs:: ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
quite heartfelt, Adam. you expressed yourself nicely and good luck with everything else. =) |
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just_me Junior Member
since 2001-10-24
Posts 19 |
very well done. it totally hit the spot. I can relate to every little detail... if only they could see they same way we do... Much love to ya! |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Oh I totally know what you are saying here. This is something I say to a close friend of mine a lot. Dawn |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Wow. You rock.   So, did you read it to her yet?!?! Share with the class. Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
*noddles* yep...read it to her, and got to have a groovy long chat with her afterwards. I'll say more when the time comes. -Adam |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
How exciting! Be sure to keep us up to date. "Like sands of the hourglass..." Theo |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
awwwwwwwww adam that's so kool! i hope she liked it. Cherish is QUEEN!! and dastard is her slave! |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
This was written so well!! Sounds like something I've gone through way back when..Sucks, huh? It's a tough situation to be in, but I wish you the best. ~*Nikki*~ ~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~ |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
I'm happy to hear you love someone so much. Your piece is quite beautiful. You should be proud of this. ~AF~ Why does Sea World have a seafood restaurant? I'm halfway through my fish burger and I realize, Oh my gosh....I could be eating a slow learner. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is simply awesome! The rhyme and meter was right on in most parts... very cool. I like the structure of the poem. Some poems I see that are centered shouldn't be, but this was the right way to do it. I'm so glad to hear that you've found someone like this in your life. Everyone needs someone once in a while... but ti does sound like a tough situation. *hugs* I'm sorry you're faced with this. But good luck! And, again, very nice work. --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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