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A Fool's Errency
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A Fool's Errency |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
I My room is almost completed. There's much more stuff I'd like to cling to. Strange... I thought there would be less... I'm moving to my father's house, Something I swore I'd never do All those years ago. II The void between us* grows day by day, And yet I find myself defending you every day. To think my home in the bush would still be there To haunt me as never before... Regret and friendship, stress and pleasure Are all the things I feel here, And still my world grows cold with doubt and fear. I broke my promise made so many years before... III I'm failing tests, assignments, life. My grades are suffering as much as is my life. Maybe I should just run and run back home Where I could be poor and rich in spirit. And you, the users of me** I am your drug and home the needle, syringe and plunger of money, status, punishment And of love.*** You say you care about me... Sometimes I think that if you'd never concieved me You would be showing much more love to me. NOTES ON THE POEM: * This has a double meaning. The void between my mother and the void between myself and God. ** My divorced parents. *** Being used by my parents to get back at each other for the crimes of so many years ago. They claim they love me but in reality they are merely using me as a financial and psychological tool, as well as a tool for leverage with eachother. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
quite deep...i enjoyed it GREATLY for the fact that it made me think within your writing...and exactly why i like reading your pieces. =) |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Good poem, and I really like the format. It's great! I can totally feel the pain coming out of your writing... that's so sad!  If you define cowardice as running away, tripping and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward. |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
I REALLY liked this.. it was very expressive and made me look farther to understand where your words were coming from. *that make sense? lol* Great post! take care, Sarah *the chains which once held us are only the chains which we've made* |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
i can really relate to this piece. that's exactly what my parents did to me. and still do. bleh. i really enjoyed it, especially the first stanza. - jen so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3 |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Wow Frac. This is something I have never really seen from you before. It really delves into your pain in all of this and how much you're hurting. I do hope that things work out for you. Take care and great write. ~AF~ "I remember the days when I was so eager to satisfy you" |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Thankyou for your replies. I think I am delving a bit into an era of self-expressive poetry that conveys a lot more of what's going on inside my head than I used to. Seems to be going well. Anyhow, thanks again for the replies. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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