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NathanS
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0 posted 2001-09-27 11:17 PM


Well, i care for my girlfriend very deeply, but i haven't told her that i love her yet- And i don't want to frighten her by doing that or something... ya know? So i wrote this poem..

How hard is it to say,
I love you

I think it every day
I love you

In the morning when I wake
I love you

During school time at break
I love you

I don't think it by mistake
I love you

At night while I eat
I love you

During the evening, while I sleep
I love you

Like a fog light messaging a ship
I love you

That is how I think of it
I love you

I could say it every day
I love you

But im afraid it would scare you away
I love you

In this i think just one time is tough
I love you

So surely twelve times is tough


-Nathan


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pure_innocence
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1 posted 2001-09-27 11:20 PM


That is so cute and sweet. She'll love it, or  at least I would, (had I ever been fortunate enough to have such a caring poetic boyfriend) *sigh* Sweet and sincere with a touch of humor, coulnd't be better. Good luck!!! And by the way, great write!!!  

How rude I am!!!! Welcome to the forums, to the family, it's great to have talent like you join our "family of friends"!!!! Hope you enjoy it!!!!

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2 posted 2001-09-28 12:00 PM


EEEEHHH!!!! *is a hopeless romantic* That is soo sweet! I'm sure she'll love it!
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Welcome Nathan!   This is great!Please check your email for a special greeting  
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4 posted 2001-09-28 03:38 AM



       WELCOME



nathan i am a girl and if my bf was to say i love you i would be so happy to hear thoose words! anyways




no officer i wasn't the one that ran up to acire and javi and kissed them than ran away it was that girl *points at lizzy*

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5 posted 2001-09-28 11:35 AM


WELCOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Nathan...OMG TELL HER!!! She'll love to hear it from you especially if you mean it   Its so nice to have you join us and keep the poems comin! You did a great job on your first post... WELCOME!

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6 posted 2001-09-28 05:59 PM


WELCOME THE "OTHER" WORLD

heheheheh

well ilike this it was really cute your Gal must be very lucky!!

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NathanS
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7 posted 2001-09-28 07:06 PM


hehe, thanks a lot for the compliments to the post  
It really helped boost my confidence on resiteing it to her  
Perhaps i will tell you the outcome of the event after i say it to her, hehe.
You peeps seem like really nice, well, people   Its a pleasure to post poetry on a community such as this
Thanks again-

            -Nahtan

"Like the sun without the moon, so is a relationship with devotion." - Me

"A poem should be written one time and from the heart, not the mind." - Me

"What use is your heart
If you can't put it into words
What use is your heart
If you can't share it with the one you love
Don't waste your gift
Given to you by the creater from above" - Me

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8 posted 2001-09-28 08:35 PM


If you find it hard to say it, give her the poem. If she's like any normal girl she'll either, A) burst into tears, or B) burst into tears. Welcome to Passions! Can't wait to read more!

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9 posted 2001-09-28 10:32 PM


Hey that was an awesome poem!! Very cute and sweet.. I know if I were the person you were giveing it to you would get tons of kisses i would love it!! Haha thanks for sharing it made my day!
     Always,
        Amanda    

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10 posted 2001-09-29 06:15 PM


Awwwww so very cute! I hope it all works out the way you want. She's a lucky girl.  
WELCOME to pip!!!
Jenn

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NathanS
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11 posted 2001-09-29 10:53 PM


I just realised an error when i re-read it
im so bummed i missed it before

It should have been so surely twelve times is enough

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12 posted 2001-09-29 11:27 PM


Great first poem it is very sweet you should give it to you girlfriend.But anyway keep up the awsome work.
  Lauren

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13 posted 2001-10-04 07:38 AM


Welcome to Passions!!  

Nice first post for us all. The overall theme was good and you wrote about it pretty well.

I hope to see you posting AND replying in here. Remember to reply as much as you decide to post.

~AF~

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14 posted 2001-10-04 02:25 PM


Welcome to Good ol Pip...
Well done on the poem. I really thought you did a good job. Sweetly written.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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15 posted 2001-10-06 12:05 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

Nice too see you deciding to join us here in PIP.  
We can always use more poets in here.  
Hope you enjoy reading and sharing.
And enjoy the friendships in this place
Everyone is beautiful in and out

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Jesa, Ina, Allysa, Marie, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Chelsea, Baker, Leah, Jess, Kimmie

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16 posted 2001-10-07 11:46 AM


This is so cute, welcome to passions a great first post of many I hope. Check out Teen chat in the discussions section to get to know people. Anyway keep up the good work  

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17 posted 2001-10-08 12:43 PM


WELCOME NATHAN!


you know what? i actually read the thing with the last line saying "so surely twelve times is enough" and thought to myself that twelve would not be enough and then read your reply half way down saying that you made a mistake and then read it as "tough"...so yeah either my brain is super smart or super dumb to do that   great poem nathan! i enjoyed it heaps!

wouldnt it be wonderful if children werent scared of looking up at the sky?

       

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