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Crash&Burn
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since 2001-01-18

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0 posted 2001-09-25 08:16 PM

oh well it's just another post hope you enjoy

Closing Thoughts:

The days all full of wonder
Times of love that shune
Glimpse of a life
A cry so far
Falling stars and winds unravelled
The mind goes free
Smiling at the lights
Happiness just overcomes me
Yet the shyness
All quiet thoughts to keep
and dreams untold all just clear

A caterpillar enclosed in itself
Scared of it's own existance
And also the rest of the world
In it's head, it's just wishing
to have for a first time
A glimpse of a life
Times of love that shune
The days all full of wonder
And the rest, all gone.

I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

Jezziekaka
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since 2001-08-21

Posts 58
where the trees touch the sky

1 posted 2001-09-25 08:24 PM

Crash&Burn~ I like this poem! I also liked those little guys!

Jezzika

be dangerous, unpredictable, and make a lot of noise!

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

2 posted 2001-09-27 01:05 PM

'ello

This is a fairly good write. I liked the overall message in it and what you're actually writing about. That is well done. Actually, I can't see anything wrong with it at all.

Thanks for the read. I did enjoy it very much.

~AF~

"Reality is only a feeble rendering of the energy brought forth by the imagination"

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-10-04 02:23 PM

Well done jorge. I liked the poem and wonder why it's only received 2 replies. Hope to hear from you soon.

Tell Jonothan to call me.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

4 posted 2001-10-04 11:14 PM

I like it a lot! It's not "just another post", it's a work of art!

Rhonda

Mr T trusts me with coaching the Jr. Girls rugby team. What was he THINKING?!?!?!

Crash&Burn
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since 2001-01-18

Posts 119

5 posted 2001-10-06 04:04 PM

thanx for posting guys, and yes dopey I wonder the same I thought this post was quite good and would get a few replies, oh well pip's been kinda slow lately. ANyways thanx for reading guys

I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-10-18 10:36 AM

Simple but still astounding poem
and yes, pip has been really slow lately
I just hope it starts picking back up
Thanks for the marvelous read
keep em coming

[This message has been edited by Anonymousfemale (edited 01-01-2000).]

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

7 posted 2001-10-18 01:35 PM

I enjoyed this a lot....good job and keep em comin!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

quietlydying

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since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

8 posted 2001-10-18 06:45 PM

'A caterpillar enclosed in itself
Scared of it's own existance'

i love that line more than you will ever know.

it provokes the mind. wow.

good job.

- jen

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

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