Dreamscape #3: Dreaming in Pictures

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chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

0 posted 2001-09-23 08:01 PM

Millions, and billions, and
Trillions of words
Lost within spirals of
Endless lips heard.
Flocking and flying
Amidst the blue sky
Falling and twirling;
Passing me by.
Screeching and screaming
And crying in pain
Watching the night as the
Living are slain.
Bloody and crudely
The vision do come
Secrets and magic
Are spells that become
Enchanting, inspiring
Embellishing time
Mindless, and spineless
Affecting the rhyme.
Holding and molding
The clay that we are
Creating the picture that
Surpasses the stars.
Dreaming in words may not be
The key
For words are but letters
That we cannot see.

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Not much to say here...except enjoy. Oh, read it slow and fast. You'll get the meaning, and the rhyming scheme better that way. ^_^

++ Leah ++

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-09-23 09:02 PM

it's better read fast

the flow is really great!!
I like the content too

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2001-09-24 09:58 AM

I agree w/Sea...i like it better read fast!! Great job and great rhyme scheme!

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

3 posted 2001-09-25 07:35 AM

'ello 'ello

I actually prefered reading this slowly. I got more out ofit by being able to pause every few lines. This series looks like it is going to be a ripper judging from the first two pieces. Once again, you've got another place in my library. Damnit, can't you be a little bit more considerate and leave a space for the others?

lol
Now a great rhyme scheme here. It read beautifully and the imagery, wow. That is all I can say about that.
I'm going to re-read this again to just make sure I got everything. Right now, doing an indepth analysis of this isn't something I can really do at the moment but just know I enjoyed reading every square inch of it.

~AF~

Kookaburra sits in the old gum tree, merry, merry king of the bush is he. Laugh! kookaburra LAGUH! Kookaburra how gay your life must be.

Alyssa

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since 2001-05-30

Posts 385
IM ENGAGED!!!!!

4 posted 2001-09-25 08:12 PM

hmmm
OOOooooooOOOOoooooOoOOOOoo
i liked this
i like it fast to
yep yep
very good i really did enjoy

"I swear officer! It was PINK."

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-09-26 10:03 PM

I actually read it in a way that it felt like it was a spell being made by a witch or something

But, geez Leah, you amaze me with every read of every poem you have shared so far. I need some of the stuff you eat, drink, or do before you write a poem. care to share

Awesome writing again as usual. keep it up

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Jesa, Ina, Allysa, Marie, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Chelsea, Baker, Leah, Jess, Kimmie

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

6 posted 2001-09-28 10:00 PM

...it s a bird..NO! its a plane...no, its ALBY!!!

man, the flow and your written form is awesome...you write so well, VERY beautiful...and enjoyed? HAI! and i'll be going now, while i try to get me back down from the sky..