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Those three words |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time 
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It almost slipped a couple times Three words I almost said. My heart and mouth were screaming YES! But NO!! reverbed inside my head. Feelings felt but never spoken It pains me not to say Those three words I wanted to Just the other day. " How can i feel if i can't breathe...?" |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
I know exactly how that feels...evil chocolate. >_< I think these ones sunk too fast in the forum...BAH! x_X Your flow is once again very well done! Short, but to the point, and well said. Another great poem from you, Kaos! ^__^ ++ Leah ++ Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
LOL@Leah!! Blame the chocolate then.  You'll say the words when you're well and ready to say them. Thanks for the read and keep writing.  ~AF~ Please put waste in a bin |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this is nicely done. they'll slip out when they're ready don't you worry. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I agree with Lizzy, you'll say it when you are ready. Never force yourself Thanks for sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Allysa, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Ma |
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Angelwings Member
since 1999-08-27
Posts 222IL, USA |
I loved this poem Kaos! It is short but very straight forward. Thank you for sharing it. I haven't read much of your work. But I hope to change that. Good luck in future writing and keep posting. Chelsea If we're told we're bad, that's the only idea we'll ever have. Maybe if we are surrounded by beauty someday we will become what we see. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Oh Wow Kaos! This was really good It hurts so much when you have to hold those 3 words inside...great poem, short and sweet! |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
ohhh i love pip cuz i getta read great stuff like this! gret piece! "I swear officer! It was PINK." |
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Delirious_Smurf Member
since 2001-08-08
Posts 90Nothingness,P.R. |
Oh I loved this so much. I know what you mean man. We can all relate Great work! I'm a professional happy puppet. |
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Starnite Junior Member
since 2001-07-05
Posts 41Wisconsin |
That was short but great. Got straight to the point. Those three little words will come out when they are ready. Just like they did for me. **Sarah  |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
short and sweet, but its really good! nice job *KiMMiE* |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Give it time; make sure it's right. The L word is big, never push it. Nice write!! Jenn "In the words of a broken heart, it's just emotion taking me over; you'll never see me fall apart, in the words of a broken heart." |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
AH! gosh! how I know what you mean. it's a lovely and wonderful poem, I'm glad you shared! and I know where you're coming from, I know what it's like to be so scared to say those 3 magic words. but, give it time, eventually, it'll feel right! I'm not as drunk as some tinkle peed I am! |
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Honey Member
since 2001-10-09
Posts 92Hot girl From Canada |
I can totally relate to this poem, love is such a hard thing to deal with. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Makes total sense. I freaked out the first time I heard it, and the first time I said it. It get's easier  Bel |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
So great and true... Sometimes you KNOW it without having to SAY it. Or having it said TO you. If it just about slipped out, then that's probably true in your case. Don't force it, just let it grow. If you define cowardice as running away and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Blah- Know the feeling man... I agree with the others- You'll say it when you are absolutely ready...And then Sky said that the other knows without you saying- Thats true to...Actions speak louder than words. Thanks for the read- Short, Simple, to the point. Every now and then I like to stick my foot in my mouth... |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*WOW* that was short but really great work! like it a lot Charisma |
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