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long walks on the beach |
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CLBinLOVE Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 147Hilton Head, SC, USA |
a universe displayed above a different world below the kind of cloudless night i love stretches from horizon to horizon met on a side, by the lights of a distant city on the other, a glimmering brightless as the moon hits the waves i walk between the two and never want to change a salty breeze pulls me tugs me, plays about me in a damp and salty frenzy that seems to give life my bare feet feel the sand the shells, the cold colc water every change in terrain i note, and leave my prints behind i pull my hands through my hair and lever want to change an orange ember glows a street lamp across the dunes headlights rake slowly across the shore a man gets out of his car and meets his waiting wife i walk on, under the stars leaving the arificial light behind finding my way again by moon and stars i never want to change on my way i meet a shade and ask him where paradise is he sais nothing, but to aide points at the woman at my side whether i walk the streets of that distant city or explore the deeps of the deep blue sea i will have here with me, and so i will never want to change the beginning was kinda inspired by the first stanza of "i wish u were here" by incubus and the last stanza was kinda taken from the poem eldorado by...forgot the guy anyway its dedicated to my one and only girlfriend and baby katie, you all probably know whoshe is online by now "as below so above and beyond i imagine |
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punkrockerrobin 
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
great poem very well written. robin bye lizzy,javi,acire,cherish,SEA,vicky,laura,andrea,jessa and anyone else i forgot i will be back to torment you soon muhahahahahahaha |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed the poem and thought you did a fine job on it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hmm "please let me know what im doin wrong, dont worry bout what i think lol" Ok!! First, no one knows me by that name, perhaps because the majority does not call me that, they call me Bel or Isabel. Hmm...let's think about why... So everyone just ignore that name, since he's my boyfriend he thinks he's so special he can call me other stuff. Well, HA! I'm gonna start calling you by ur middle name there Craig! Then how will ya like that eh!?!? Anyway personally I love the poem Bel |
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Jezziekaka Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 58where the trees touch the sky |
Wow! amzing poem! I could see almost everything.  Da kaka be dangerous, unpredictable, and make a lot of noise! |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
The imagery in this is exceptional. You've managed to write a very beautiful scene that sort of reminds me of Grease for some strange reason...lol. Thanks for the read. Keep sharing. ~AF~ "Reality is only a feeble rendering of the energy brought forth by the imagination" |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
I hope this still applies. I truely and sincerely love you Craig. I am in love with you. It is my hope that you are too, though that is up to you to decide. I am sorry for everything. We can work through this, we can do this, I know it. I love you con todo mi corazon Bel |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hmmmmmmm Katie eh?  you both show a lot of your feelings for each other in your poems I enjoyed this read a lot thanks for Katie's name ha ha ha ha  hi Sweets, Lizzy, Jesa, Ina, Allysa, Marie, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Chelsea, Baker, Leah, Jess, Kimmie |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
I thought about this at the wedding..something about the Moorish castle..hmm... Yet I ask again if this still applies. Te amo, para siempre(unless you wish otherwise )Bel P.S. Acire, pppllllleeeeaaaseeee don't call me that! Even my mom calls me "Bel" |
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CLBinLOVE Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 147Hilton Head, SC, USA |
wow didnt know this would get so many replies! its jus a poem i felt inspired to write in english... yes, bel, it still applies...if thats ok with you...? "as below so above and beyond i imagine |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I really like the imagery that you used in this...i really enjoyed this poem , keep em comin! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
me too love the imagery within....great write. Charisma |
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