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branden726
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0 posted 2001-08-24 11:12 PM


The way we kiss,
In a nighfull bliss,
Everything freezes,
From just that kiss.

The way we kiss,
Makes me feel free,
Can u feel the breeze,
And hear the trees.

The way we kiss,
Makes everything so small,
When we kiss our bodies embrace,
I want to faint when I see your face.

The way we kiss,
Nothing will ever change,
Me looking into your eyes,
Forever hoping im with you till I die.

Short but sweet the first in many ive wrote, ive been away with a virus on my computer but im back now Hi guys.

All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare!
~*~Branden~*~

© Copyright 2001 Branden Jacobs - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-08-25 01:05 PM


this is very good! i liked it a lot.  pretty good for being away for a while and i totally hear ya on the virus thing. i got one. sucks don't it?


Valerie

"...And i want to take you down, but your soul could not be found, doesn't matter much you see cause your disease is killing me..." -Saliva

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2 posted 2001-08-25 01:27 PM


My computer is virus free!!!!  HEHE.  :knock on wood:  So anyway, I really liked this poem.  It wasnt rusty, so dont worry about that.  You did a nice job.
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3 posted 2001-08-31 12:13 PM


I thought you did just fine here Branden...but it wasn't your best. Anyhow, I did like it.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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4 posted 2001-08-31 01:50 AM


i enjoyed this one. im with dopey though, it isnt as great as sum of your others but its good enough to be enjoyed lots!

............Daffodils
........Daffodils .....
....Daffodils..........
Daffodils .............

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5 posted 2001-08-31 08:35 AM


I hate viruses!! Grrr!!!  

But anyway, welcome back, this poem was very sweet.

Jenn

"Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill

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