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thug-a-licious
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0 posted 2001-07-31 01:25 AM



tears stain my face,
they trickle from my eyes,
I wipe them away ,
but they don't seem to dry.

my head aches,
and my heart aches too,
I guess because I'm missing you.

I was stupid for having faith in you,
stupid to believe your lies,
but i am even more stupid to sit here and cry!

Say goodbye to heartbreak( i'm becoming a nun!)
say goodbye to life,
but most of all say goodbye to the tears that stain my face at night


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MoeRocko
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1 posted 2001-07-31 01:57 AM


I like this style Lotz! nice flow  

"Nothing will stop me, and whether I'm here or wherever I may be, I'll always have the same feelings, I'll say what I feel." ~Lennon
  

Shygirl82
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2 posted 2001-07-31 03:39 AM


This was good...I could totally relate to it.  I know that it sucks and I hope things get better for you very soon...
~Nikki~

allie
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3 posted 2001-07-31 03:41 AM


How many times have we been in this awful situation! whats worse how many more times will we be in it...

It's wonderful that you can make a joke out of it... with the nun thing...

But a horrible place to be... Anyway heart ache produces great poetry... good work

ALLIE

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4 posted 2001-07-31 02:05 PM


Hehe you went trough three stages of a break up in this poem  
I like it though, sounds like it helped you alot  

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5 posted 2001-07-31 03:26 PM


Don't you hate the crying part?
I won't let myself cry over my "ONE AND ONLY"
I say to myself "big girls don't cry"
and get on with life.
It's not worth crying over someone who won't cry over you.

ANyways, good read.

Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself.  That's what I live by.

cutie2005
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6 posted 2001-07-31 08:55 PM


Hey,
  This is what I'm going threw right now haha!! I like it a lot!! Well, I mean your poem... The nun thing was great.. After my "first love" messed up big thats what I said i wanted to be... Cuz then no one could do it again!  Haha I liked!!
    Always,
      Amanda

If you love someone you would go to the end of the world for them!



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7 posted 2001-07-31 10:11 PM


a heartfelt piece...hard feelings to go through...nice job.

if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take

Spice
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8 posted 2001-07-31 11:16 PM


"I was stupid for having faith in you,
stupid to believe your lies,
but i am even more stupid to sit here and cry!"
I LOVED those lines..I could relate so much..lol..And the lil side comment on you becomind a nun- made me grin. Everyone feels that way at times. HaHa.
Great write though. More!!!

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9 posted 2001-08-02 05:21 PM


Well done here! I liked this one a lot.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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10 posted 2001-08-04 04:32 PM


I liked this... I thought it was cute when you siad you're becoming a nun   Keep your head up   I hope you feel better.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

bOoGaSuGa
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11 posted 2001-08-04 04:43 PM


this was a good poem   i liked reading it
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