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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733
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-I was just playing around with this one. It's the reaction I'm HOPING to get soon..from some people...I've changed a lot since they've seen me last. It's not one of my best but I didn't want it to be  -Bel My shadow cast upon you, You notice its disproportions. Looking up at me you understand my hourglass. Your eyes grow wide as your glance travels. Up up and to my face. Disbelieving-ly you recognize me. (Hey baby Do you still know me now? So tell me Have you missed me since I’ve been gone? Hey baby Do you like my body now? So tell me Do you kick your self somehow? [now what was that you once said?]) Silently I look down upon you. Twisting a smile slowly across my face. It takes no words to say it to you. Your unsuspecting eyes tell it all. (Poor baby Do you remember what you thought of me? Oh I see Is it that you’re jealous now? Poor baby Do you remember what was said ‘bout me? Yes I see Is it that you want me now? [Aren’t you so jealous now?]) Your mind reeling you try to understand why you were blind before. If you were blind before. Did you really expect the change. Your eyebrows come closer as your glance travels. Down down and to my feet. Disbelievingly you look again. (Hey baby Do you still know me now? So tell me Have you missed me since I’ve been gone? Hey baby Do you like my body now? So tell me Do you kick your self somehow? [now what was that you once said?]) Subtly I shake my head. Holding back the laughter that begs to come. Words can’t explain the brief chain of thought. Just a few seconds tell it all. (Poor baby Do you remember what you thought of me? Oh I see Is it that you’re jealous now? Poor baby Do you remember what was said ‘bout me? Yes I see Is it that you want me now? [Aren’t you so jealous now?]) After all, its the future right?  |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
very nice! i really liked this it fits in with my life right about now! "I have no never-again, I have no always" |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
OOOoo Wonderful write here! I LOVE the attitude it holds. I liked the description of the eye brows coming close as he looked you over etc... That was cool. ANYWAY... Ya- I liked this alot. Great write! |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
I loved the way you formatted this - to me it kinda set the vibe. The content was just too much  I know how ya feel... I liked this one a lot. |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
Definately agreeing with Spice on this one...Had some serious kick butt attitude! Great write..thanks for sharing ~Nikki~ It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow i liked the formatting here. The syle of this one is very well done. I liked it!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
this one was kool. original. I liked beaucoup. keep writing. Regina If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Very creative, Bel! I really liked this one! The format caught my eye... well worth the read Nicely done.--Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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bOoGaSuGa Member
since 2001-08-03
Posts 54 |
good work keep it up |
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