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Snooganzmeister32
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since 2001-07-17
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Cali, USA

0 posted 2001-07-29 08:32 PM


~MUSIC~

I am sitting in a corner, crying
I sit there for hours, not making a sound
I think very hard with a blank look on my face
I hear screaming and crying in my head
It sounds like music
So loud
So beautiful
I could dance
But I cant move my body to get up
In my mind I see a dancing demon holding a bloody knife
He is smiling at me
So I wave
Am I insane?
I see blood
Slowly dripping into the fiery pits of hell
I hear an evil laugh
And realize it’s just my screaming
I might be going crazy
But I really like this creepy music

© Copyright 2001 Sarah - All Rights Reserved
Spice
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since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.
1 posted 2001-07-29 09:03 PM


This is a really creepy, uneasy piece for me.. But for some odd reason I'm really liking it. It's very different. Interesting. The emotion on this was was displayed wonderfully. Great job!
fozzyozzy
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since 2001-03-15
Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia
2 posted 2001-07-29 10:20 PM


Yikes.  Excuse me whilst I shiver a while.
There, done for now.  Wow. this was good.  The mindset is very original.  

PS, are you a Kevin Smith fan?  I notice the name.

"and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings

Wicced_Witch
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since 2000-02-06
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Clarksville, TN, USA
3 posted 2001-07-30 12:24 PM


It was kind of creepy, yet very good at the same time.  Emotional, I loved it.
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4 posted 2001-07-30 01:15 AM


I liked this one. I haven't seen yer poetry around so i'll just welcome you. Welcome to Passions! I enjoyed the poem! I hope to see you post here in the future!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Ina
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since 2000-10-09
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Quebec, Canada
5 posted 2001-07-30 11:49 AM


wow. *hair on the back of my neck rises* this was good, disturbing but good.

Regina

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Lynchburg, Virginia
6 posted 2001-08-04 02:14 AM


I really like this... I haven't seen much of you around, but I hope I see more soon!  I loved this poem.  Music can have such an effect on the soul.. Nicely done!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

bOoGaSuGa
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since 2001-08-03
Posts 54

7 posted 2001-08-04 03:15 AM


wow lol
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