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HeAvEnS AnGeL
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since 2001-05-17

Posts 168
The Hot Girl From Canada

0 posted 2001-07-27 07:56 PM

Frustraition takes over,
My hands begin to shake.
My head begins to pound,
The ground begins to quake.

As much as I want to,
I cannot fight back.
You throw out insults,
About the qualities I lack.

We used to be friends,
But now all you do is hate.
You have an attitude towards everything,
And you wonder why you can't find a date.

You think your the best,
You use people as your stepping stone.
Then come home to your "palace,"
To sit on your throne.

You look right at me,
And whisper in someones ear.
I know your talking about me,
Even though I can't hear.

So you can be immature,
I don't really care.
Just stay out of my face,
And I'll stay out of your hair.

Whatever tomorrow brings I'll be there, with open arms, and open eyes ~Incubus~

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

1 posted 2001-07-28 01:04 AM

OOoo Ash. Sounds like a bitter fight going on. I liked the throne part. HeHe. Anyway- Hope all gets better. Nive write. Flowed wonderfully.

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

2 posted 2001-07-28 01:18 AM

I saw a couple of places where I thought the flow was off, but I really liked this one anyway. Keep up the good work.

-Kosetsu

"Love, like the Rose, is desired. And like the Rose, Love has its thorns." - Unknown

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

3 posted 2001-07-28 01:53 AM

i agree with kosetsu..overall it is a great poem...i hate backstabbers to the death...especially if they were close firends once....another thing a little thing.."your" should be "you're"...thats all..

"Killer in me is a killer in you, my love
Send a smile over to you"
Disarm
Smashing Pumkins

allie
Member

since 2001-07-09

Posts 218
Australia

4 posted 2001-07-28 03:27 AM

loved the sum up!!
Really good poem cause its so nasty ... lol

also well written hope things work out though'

ALLIE

angel_2401
Member

since 2001-06-12

Posts 131
Cincinnati, OH

5 posted 2001-07-28 05:45 PM

Oooooooooo I've been through that.. I hope things get better! But this is a great poem.. Keep it up!

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

I'm a nobody, nobody is perfect, therefore I'm perfect.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-07-29 01:16 PM

Great job on this one. I really enjoyed this. *sigh* teenage hypocrisy.....so trivial. Anyhow, good luck with this.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

lilibeelee
Member

since 2001-07-12

Posts 143

7 posted 2001-07-30 01:01 PM

I can relate totaly to this!! great job

lilibeelee
Member

since 2001-07-12

Posts 143

8 posted 2001-07-30 01:04 PM

I can relate totaly to this!! great job

Snooganzmeister32
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since 2001-07-17

Posts 67
Cali, USA

9 posted 2001-07-30 01:38 PM

That was perfect venting! Sweet write!

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

10 posted 2001-08-04 02:17 AM

Who says writing isnt one of the best ways to vent? I hope you feel better

Nicely done, I really enjoyed this poem! It's well written... always write about it

It helps.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

bOoGaSuGa
Member

since 2001-08-03

Posts 54

11 posted 2001-08-04 03:12 AM

nice poem i liked reading it

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