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Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

0 posted 2001-07-25 06:54 PM

The chill she sends through my bones
Is this the feel of rejuvenation?
The feeling of this woman I can’t see
Is this the feeling of love’s creation?

The touch of her hand on my arm
Sends me into ecstasy
If only that touch so soft,
Was more than an illusion of reality.

I’ve known this woman forever
Though we’ve never met.
If I’d met such a woman,
How could such sparkling eyes I forget?

Deep in blissful time,
I know she will appear,
My arms enrapturing her so delicately,
My love's become so clear.
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Thanks to Jessica for the last stanza and the title. I seem to be on this theme of a phantom girl...o_O

-Kosetsu

"Love, like the Rose, is desired. And like the Rose, Love has its thorns." - Unknown

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

1 posted 2001-07-25 08:04 PM

I like this alot, Adam. It's one of my fav of your recent posts. The description/imagery was nice. Very well done here.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

DarkenedShadow
Member

since 2001-07-23

Posts 114
Kansas

2 posted 2001-07-25 08:11 PM

Yes and he posts yet another masterpiece... sorry it just amazes me on how well you write. I like the way you seem to put rejuvenate in this piece, it wroks so perfectly with what your expresing. /Nick/

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

3 posted 2001-07-25 08:12 PM

Yeah..I really liked writing this one. I think some of my best stuff has come out in the last week or two.

-Kosetsu

"Love, like the Rose, is desired. And like the Rose, Love has its thorns." - Unknown

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-07-26 02:42 AM

So sweet!! Awwwwww sounds like you are falling for somebody hard!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-07-30 11:27 PM

This poem ROCKS, Adam! I loved the rhyme scheme you used... fit the poem perfectly. Wow.. the imagery here was absolutely wonderful. Nicely done! I really enjoyed this one.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

Shygirl82
Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

6 posted 2001-07-31 03:46 AM

I have to agree with Marie...the imagery you used was just incredible. These were great descriptions and it flowed just great. Excellent piece!
~Nikki~

It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them.

Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

7 posted 2001-07-31 01:57 PM

damn good stuff here bro...
ahhh the power of the mind and the heart together

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