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branden726 
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI 
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What can you take from me now, What can you take after you've torn my heart, Absolutly nothing can you take from me, The only thing you can not have is My Poetry, You take that from me you've taken my life, Plz just remember you've already stolen my heart, My poetry of love, My poetry of hate, Everything i write about has something to do with fate, I love my poetry and you can never have it, Im off to find the heart i lost, Im off to write some more poetry. Not the best but describes my feelings. All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare! |
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Alexia
since 2001-06-07
Posts 164Sweet And Sassy |
Its a good poem!!!  ~Alex~ If I tell you I love you, Can I keep you? |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
I'll agree with you and say that this isn't your best. It's a strong topic but very weakly written. You might want to remember to spell the word in full to give the piece the full effect. Thanks for sharing this. ~AF~ Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me... |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i agree with eJ..vERY strong topic..but it lacked that power...i relate to this TOTaly on what you were saying. you kinda triggered me write about this...i dunno...cuz it pained me when someone tryed to do the same...but enjoyed it a lot...branden [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 07-14-2001).] |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
E.J. is right...Not your best. But I still enjoyed it. Keep posting. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Good let out of emotions here Branden...I always said that nothing could take me away from my poetry, but I also say that I'd give it up for the person I truly love if it ever came down to that. Anyhow, hope to see more man!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I guess you're just letting steam off. Not you best, but still a good read. hope to see more in the future. thanks for sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Strong topic. I really enjoyed this, Branden. My fave lines: "Plz just remember you've already stolen my heart, My poetry of love, My poetry of hate." Nicely done! --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Well i never really did thank anyone for there reply's and i feel bad but i still love ya guys THANKS i appreciate it. |
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