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Crash&Burn
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since 2001-01-18

Posts 119

0 posted 2001-07-26 12:04 PM

enjoy.....

Chronic solitude

The emptiness that haunt’s me
Pursuing the darkness
Into the abyss of never
And never it is that I find it
That which will fill me
It comes and goes like a chronic disease
Sometimes it stays for a mere day
But oh those lonely hours
Hurt me in such a way
I can’t seem to crack a smile
All the happiness has left me
I become the broken child
And anything can wound me
I live to wait a day for this to end
Yet it always comes back
The emptiness that haunt’s me

I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-07-26 04:35 PM

Great job here Jorge. This was a pretty sad poem. You doing ok?
Anyhow I enjoyed it. Keep posting.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Ina
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

2 posted 2001-07-26 04:43 PM

This was a good poem.hope all is well.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-07-26 06:50 PM

i can relate...awesome job on expressing this, Jorge...as i hope you are ok.

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

4 posted 2001-07-27 03:23 AM

OOoo. I liked this one also. So far I've enjoyed all your posts. Hope to see another one soon. This was quite a depressing piece, I could relate quite easily. HaHa- but why is it that you insist on ruining the mood after each post with the damn farting smilie? LOL. ANyway like I said- Nice read.
Off I go.

Jessica

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since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

5 posted 2001-07-27 03:52 AM

I really enjoyed this one...

Keep it up!!

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

cherish
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since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

6 posted 2001-07-27 04:07 AM

I can’t seem to crack a smile
All the happiness has left me
I become the broken child

i can relate to this unfortunalty....i liked this post a lot jorge...make sure you do smile buddy...thanks for sharing

~tears are what kiss this cheek at night~

Starnite
Junior Member

since 2001-07-05

Posts 41
Wisconsin

7 posted 2001-07-27 12:54 PM

I liked it!! Keep up the great posting.

**Sarah

chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

8 posted 2001-07-27 01:55 PM

Such a deep piece.

The emptiness that haunt’s me
Pursuing the darkness
Into the abyss of never
And never it is that I find it
That which will fill me

Those lines made me think...at first it was confusing, but i thought about it. Those lines are very complex, I like.

I hope to see more from you.

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

9 posted 2001-07-28 11:43 PM

Great write, Jorge!
"It comes and goes like a chronic disease
Sometimes it stays for a mere day
But oh those lonely hours
Hurt me in such a way"
That is written really well. It's like someone just sitting there pleading into his hands. Well, that's what I saw...

Good job.

~AF~

"Reality is just a crutch for people who can't cope with drugs." -- Robin Williams

katherine
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since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

10 posted 2001-07-29 12:28 PM

this is really really good! it's so sad, hope everything is alright.

katie

"by takeing no risks you are really risking everything"
Vic's RE book

Crash&Burn
Member

since 2001-01-18

Posts 119

11 posted 2001-07-31 02:10 PM

hi everyone, thanx for reading this, I wrote it some time ago when I was feeling kind off sad and empty but yeah anywyas I'm fine now so it's all good. I'm glad you guys like it and I hope to see you all around again, as always....

I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

12 posted 2001-08-04 02:20 PM

Wow.. this is very sad. I hope you're alright. I enjoyed this poem.. it was dark.. deep words. Thanks for sharing. Nicely done!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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