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Jenabou
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0 posted 2001-07-09 11:13 AM



She doesn't see the pain in his eyes
cos she won't even look him the face
she thinks if she blocks him out
the memories will fade without a trace
she truly believes her heart will heal
if she only pushes him away
shes breaking his heart,shes breaking her heart
more and more every day
She can't understand
that what she's doing isn't helping a thing
they're both hurting,she doesn't want to remember
the happiness he used to bring
He can't stand the heartache
she feeds him each day
he wonders how much more he must take
A girl's heart can be her worst nightmare
it consumed her...
now she feels empty
because he's not there

The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle

© Copyright 2001 Jenna-Nicole Boutilier - All Rights Reserved
LoneWolf
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1 posted 2001-07-09 12:46 PM


Wow i really like this. i think you did a good job on this.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

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2 posted 2001-07-09 02:37 PM


Besides a few minor typos this is a great piece!
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3 posted 2001-07-09 02:43 PM


I really liked it it's really true I've actually done that and I'm a guy .  so I can relate with that nice piece.

we fall like the stars then rise like the sun..Repentence.Forgiveness.We are blame worthy hold us to our wrongs..but don't hold our wrongs against us

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4 posted 2001-07-09 02:59 PM


Sad but true..
I know exactly what you mean.
nicely done..
So how are you?
i'm good so i hope you are.
and yeah!
~moi~  

~*Freedom Is Not Free*~ (Korean War Memorial)

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5 posted 2001-07-09 03:08 PM


I understand how you feel.  This was a wonderful poem.  Keep up the great work!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

CwboyAtHeart
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6 posted 2001-07-09 08:15 PM


I like this.  Well written.  I think the best way to get over it is to face that person and try to be friends.  That way you're not losing all of the person, and not breaking either hearts completely in half.  Not a fun situation.

      - Cody -

If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

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7 posted 2001-07-09 10:48 PM


this was nicely written...on the emotions expressed...i liked the poem

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8 posted 2001-07-09 10:51 PM


Sometimes members of the female persuasion (and I'm one, so don't jump down my neck  ) tend to think that the easiest way to leave someone is to draw away from him. I like the way you expressed what really goes on when we try it. Guys do it too, yeah, but not as much (one point for the guys). Great write, and great read!!
Rhonda  

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9 posted 2001-07-10 04:48 AM


Nicely done here. I enjoyed this one. I hope to see you come around more. I haven't seen you in a while.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

mistic
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10 posted 2001-07-10 01:05 PM


I really liked this one... even though it hit me in  the face hard because it's something i'm going through right now... but i liked it. keep writing
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11 posted 2001-07-15 08:10 PM


Wow, this was an awesome poem.  Very nice work, Jen.  This one hit me hard.  I know the feelings, and the emotions you portrayed were excellent.  Very nice work.

"A girl's heart can be her worst nightmare
it consumed her...
now she feels empty
because he's not there"

Wonderful work.. simply awesome.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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12 posted 2001-08-02 09:25 AM


This is all so true Jenabou
awesome write, I love it
thanks for the share

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

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13 posted 2001-08-02 10:47 AM


The title made me come but your poem made me stay   I really liked how you described how each others hearts are hurting, very nicely done.

"Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before."
~Steven Wright

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14 posted 2001-08-02 11:19 AM


this is a great poem   i loved it and it hit pretty close to home so i can see exactly where you are coming from here...  sometimes it is hard to open up, even to someone you care about, for fear of getting hurt again.  i had a figurative concrete wall up in all of my past relationships and it always ended with me pushing the person so far away that we broke up... but sometimes you need to take the chance of getting hurt... it will make the relationship much better and the end of the relationship won't be as bitter as if you push the person away and cause them pain everyday...
hope i helpeed a little...

*Pixie*

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15 posted 2001-08-02 12:56 PM


awwwwwwwww
i feel for her
this was a nice piece!

"I have no never-again, I have no always"
Pablo Nerudo

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16 posted 2001-08-02 01:34 PM


Whoa... I have definately been there.. actually I am there now *sigh* Wonderful way of expressing yourself here... I liked this poem very much.
Spice
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17 posted 2001-08-02 01:59 PM


wow! I can't believe I missed this when it was first posted. Shame on me.
I liked this ALOT. I could relate so much it was scary. I do the SAME thing this girl does... And I can't help it. Ya well...anyway- I hope to see more from you soon...and I promise to reply sooner! hehehe.. Great write!

chasing rain
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18 posted 2001-08-02 03:17 PM


*sigh* So many of us do that...*people stare at her* Don't look at me!
Anyways, this was a good piece, very realistic. I too missed this, but I was away, so...MUAHAHA!  
Great job! Hope to see more from you!

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

Shygirl82
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19 posted 2001-08-02 07:22 PM


Wow...I really liked this one.  This one kinda slapped me in the face...cant believe I didnt get to this one sooner.  Great piece!!
~Nikki~

It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them.

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