This is the story about a call that changed my destiny... LOL Sorry, BSB moment!

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Suga_Baby
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0 posted 2001-06-27 10:02 PM

A photograph in her hand,
a girl sits on her bed.
She reaches for the telephone,
as fear flows through her head.

Four months ago it ended.
They haven’t talked much since.
But, she gathers up the courage,
though filled with hesitance.

What she is about to do,
she really cannot explain.
But if she doesn’t take a chance,
she just might go insane.

She begins to dial digits
on her cordless telephone.
Sweaty palms, racing heart,
what if he’s not home?

She’s trembling a little bit
as the phone begins to ring.
One... two... five rings now,
nobody’s answering.

And so the girl hangs up,
lets out a frustrated sigh.
Since nobody is home right now,
later, again, she’ll try.

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

anonymous albert ?

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1 posted 2001-06-28 12:17 PM

the discription was awesome...soo well expressed...i could feel the feelings in this one...i enjoyed it

...bye

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Fading Away

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2 posted 2001-06-28 12:41 PM

This is really good. Wow... very familiar feelings here... all too familiar. The sweaty palms, shaky knees. Love sucks, lol. This is very good. If this is about you, then best of luck.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

Skyfire

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3 posted 2001-06-28 12:46 PM

Oh the familiararity. (woah. Big word) I like the way you described all of it! Great job!

Rhonda

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Marshalzu

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4 posted 2001-06-28 07:11 AM

Great work I really enjoyed the read

Keep on sharing.
Andrew

"Here we are again finding ourselves at the end Of the wrong stick I guess it's far too late I'm building up the barricades In my head" -My Vitriol

keoni
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5 posted 2001-06-28 10:35 AM

This one was really good. Great description. I know the feeling all too well, but in my case I usually can never finish dialing before I chicken out.
Jon

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Raven Skye
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6 posted 2001-06-28 11:31 AM

that was scary cuz at that moment I was calling up my friend christine to tell her that I got floor seats for the backstreet boys and I started reading this and she's not home! AHH!! That's crazy. But hey this is a beautiful poem. I relate to it very well. GOOD JOB!!

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learn what parts of yourself to trust.

Heavens Tears

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7 posted 2001-06-28 11:44 AM

Great job. Like most people, I have felt that way too many times. But I hope yours worked out.

*Amanda*
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to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Tamma

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8 posted 2001-06-28 12:52 PM

LoL...I've ben there before...But I've never gotten up enough courage to call back *sigh* I think I'd be better off not calling, anyway

*sigh* nobody cares
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scout
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9 posted 2001-06-28 01:33 PM

i only give 2 rings before i hang up...

xscoutx
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FoxXena
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10 posted 2001-06-28 05:31 PM

Well that was really touching. I liked the poem-line (kinda like story-line only applies to poems).

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anonymousfemale
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11 posted 2001-06-29 07:19 AM

Nice one, Sara.

When people don't answer their phones it is soooo annoying.

Thanks for the read.

~AF~

Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!!

Acies

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12 posted 2001-06-29 01:29 PM

dial *67 first before you call, so if he has caller ID, he wouldn't know it's you

j/k
what does bsb moment mean?

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Suga_Baby
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13 posted 2001-06-29 02:17 PM

BSB is the Backstreet Boys silly! *LMAO* "This is the story about a call that changed my destiny" is a sample of lyrics from their EVIL song "the call"... This is the first of two poems about me calling my ex... I will post the second one when I FINALLY get ahold of the little craphead *LOL* Such loving words

Dopey Dope

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14 posted 2001-06-29 07:42 PM

I liked this one. You did well on expressing frustration here. I hope things improve though

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I admire it daily

Jenn Cirrincione

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15 posted 2001-06-29 09:00 PM

LOL I know this feeling all too well...Oh my!! And yeah, I don't like that song too much...so, go ahead steal the title... Muhahaha!!

Nice job on this!!

Jenn

"Woah my love, my darling, I've hungered for your touch a long, lonely time"- Unchained Melody

stace_co2003
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16 posted 2001-07-08 06:14 PM

this is really great!! sorry for taking so long to reply..but I really like this poem..as I can relate to it! thanks for sharing!

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