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Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01

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washing DC

0 posted 2001-06-25 11:20 PM

She is an addictive flower
that blooms in my gardin

Beautiful petals and lace
yet I dare not touch her
because those men that do
can never let her go,
and in the end
are themselves destroyed

obscurity of cloud
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since 2001-05-11

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1 posted 2001-06-26 12:16 PM

what a metaphor! you've put this together very professionally; this is excellent.

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

2 posted 2001-06-26 12:18 PM

hey this was pretty cool. short but sweet, ya know? i luved the metaphor also. great work
-fear-

emotions are like evil serpents that coil around your mind---me "i cannot save you, i can't even save myself"--stabbing westward

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2001-06-26 12:20 PM

this is very good

Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01

Posts 374
washing DC

4 posted 2001-06-26 01:59 AM

thanx a lot girls
its really been a long time since I posted
but this one just came to me

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-06-26 02:21 AM

This is awesome. THe use of the metaphor here is simply genius. Awesome last two lines... wowsers. This is good! Nice work! I'm looking forward to reading more from you.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-06-26 03:45 AM

Very very nicely done here. I loved this poem!!!! Awesome job!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

stace_co2003
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since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

7 posted 2001-06-26 08:25 AM

this is really awesome, I love how you describe things in here!

-->Don't frown. You never know who is falling in love with your smile.
-->Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

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Lurking

8 posted 2001-06-26 08:26 AM

Wow this is really good, thanks for the great read and keep on sharing

Andrew

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

9 posted 2001-06-27 07:02 PM

Short but has so much meaning in to it. beautiful write, keep it up. thanks for the read

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 137
VA (U.S.A)

10 posted 2001-06-27 10:10 PM

short and sweet, with a great use of metaphors. it seems that Jose Marti is back with a vengeance. Nice job!

anonymous albert ?

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11 posted 2001-06-28 12:18 PM

the meaning behind this poem...hit me hard...something i as thinking to myself these days

...awesome job!...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

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Riding

12 posted 2001-06-28 12:42 PM

Hey wow. Cool!

Rhonda

"Amy, can you PLEASE come to Spain with us so that we have someone to keep Rhonda calm?" - Mr. Ardiel *insert hysterical laughter from me here*

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

13 posted 2001-06-29 02:03 AM

How very interesting. You've opened up many new thoughts in my head. Thanks for that.

To the library...

~AF~

Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!!

scout
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since 2001-06-16

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no place owns me

14 posted 2001-06-29 11:35 AM

this is a really good poem, i enjoyed reading it., short but powerful (just the way i like to eat my poetry)

xscoutx
"Son of man with one blow I am about to take away from you the delight of your eyes. Yet do not lament or weep or shed any tears."-Eze.24:16

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

15 posted 2001-06-29 03:31 PM

Like scout said, it was short and powerful, but there is some talent in doing that. If you can put power into that little poem, you gotta be good!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

16 posted 2001-07-03 04:26 PM

How did this slip by me?

I really enjoyed this.
Short yet filled with emotion.
Nicely written.
I hope you continue to post again.

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

17 posted 2001-07-10 11:00 AM

Whoa! this was sooo awesome

i really enjoyed it!!! This was written so amazingly....great job and keep em comin!

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