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Jenn Cirrincione

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0 posted 2001-06-30 09:23 AM

I don't need your pity,
Having already given me so much.
You've caused the pain,
You've caused the confusion.
Love from you was never free,
It cost my life,
My mind,
My freedom.
I was pulled down,
Simply drowning.
But now I see,
How much you lack,
How much you need.
Well, you've crossed that line,
The undetermined, hazy line,
Point of no return.
Therefore I don't need your pity.
Rather soon however... I'll be offering mine.

Marshalzu

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Lurking

1 posted 2001-06-30 09:44 AM

Great work Jenn, I really enjoyed the read

Andrew

scout
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2 posted 2001-06-30 11:08 AM

nice poem, i really love the ending of the ending...

Dopey Dope

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since 2000-08-30

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3 posted 2001-06-30 11:37 AM

I enjoyed this one. I really liked the ending. Whoever this is for it sucks to be them. Wow....well nice job on this one. I really liked it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Heavens Tears

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4 posted 2001-06-30 12:24 PM

I liked this one, especially the way you twisted it around in teh end. Great job!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Jenn Cirrincione

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5 posted 2001-06-30 05:53 PM

Thanks all lot all of you! Much appreciated.

"Woah my love, my darling, I've hungered for your touch a long, lonely time"- Unchained Melody

Fading Away

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6 posted 2001-06-30 07:42 PM

Jenn! WOOHOO! Wowsers.. this is a good poem. Sometimes, when we find ourselves in the most unhealthy relationship, we have to just take a step back and think about what's right for us. I'm glad you got out of something that was obviously very unhealthy. Nice work, I really liked the last line.

--Marie

Jenn Cirrincione

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7 posted 2001-06-30 09:37 PM

Thanks much Marie.

I actually got out of this relationship long ago, but I've never been quite able to pull away completely. A few days ago, he made it much easier. Good riddance I say.... I've found someone who is so much more wonderful...so much sweeter...someone who loves me much more honestly. I'm so much more content now.
And yes Dopes...I agree, it does suck to be him. LOL

"Woah my love, my darling, I've hungered for your touch a long, lonely time"- Unchained Melody

anonymous albert ?

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8 posted 2001-07-01 06:08 PM

...i really liked the whole poem...but the ending was awesome!...great job here jenn...i enjoyed it a lot...glad to see you post again lol...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Acies

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9 posted 2001-07-02 10:40 PM

Jenn, that's the way to go. Keeping it real and being strong. You go girl

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

Skyfire

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10 posted 2001-07-03 01:19 AM

Hhmmm... Too familiar feelings here. I love the way you expressed it. Great write!

Rhonda

"Amy, can you PLEASE come to Spain with us so that we have someone to keep Rhonda calm?" - Mr. Ardiel *insert hysterical laughter from me here*

Jenn Cirrincione

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11 posted 2001-07-03 08:00 AM

Thanks Albert, Acire and Skyfire. Your comments are much appreciated.

"Woah my love, my darling, I've hungered for your touch a long, lonely time"- Unchained Melody

[This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 07-03-2001).]

anonymousfemale
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12 posted 2001-07-03 10:17 AM

What a strong bunch of emotions you have in this, Jenn. I liked the little twist at the end though. It was very unexpected. Very well written and it is good to see you being so strong.

Well done on the 2000 by the way.

~AF~

Never speak disrespectfully of Society. Only people who can't get into it do that.
~ Oscar Wilde ~

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13 posted 2001-07-03 03:00 PM

Ooo Nice turnaround. Great work, can't think of much to say but I know I like it!

No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee

Jenn Cirrincione

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14 posted 2001-07-03 04:48 PM

Thanks Liz and EB!! It was very good of you to read and reply. And thank you for the congrats on my 2000 post.

Jenn

"Woah my love, my darling, I've hungered for your touch a long, lonely time"- Unchained Melody

xShUgArHiGhx

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15 posted 2001-07-10 11:03 AM

I've definately felt this before...the whole situation sux but u put it into words very nicely. Good job...

Child of the Stars

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16 posted 2001-07-10 11:14 AM

Yea yea Jenn! You go girl! *does the go Jenn dance* Good write here, loved the ending as well.

PEACE!
~Carly

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"Go outside and use your own eyes. You'll be surprised to see things you've never been taught."
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