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Kethry
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0 posted 2001-06-07 05:44 AM


Marsha love this one's for you. See the things you make me do? The challenge met now try and see if you can steal these words from me. Whoops! I didn't steal them from you, I didn't! Well maybe some of them  



It's snowing in Mildura
the moon is turning blue
the unthinkable has happened
as all my thoughts return to you

I'm sitting in my office
a  half smile on my lips
memories of  your kisses
and searching fingertips

my mind lost in a reverie
as I gleefully recall
the taste of you within my mouth
and how you gave your all

I reminisce about you there
filling all my being
I can smell you on my skin
and oh the things I'm seeing

eyes that leave me gasping
thighs as firm as coal
with diamond hard desire
I give to you my soul

I didn't want to love you
just wanted to be friends
but it's snowing in Mildura
so I can make amends

I cannot forget the wonder
unlikely as it seems
you have become knight errant
a messenger of dreams

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life.  Patty Hansen.



© Copyright 2001 Lynne Dale - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 2001-06-07 06:15 AM


Ah! So nice to see you... and your writing is superb too...

Regards O Kethry,
Sudhir

Kethry
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2 posted 2001-06-07 06:22 AM


O Sudhir,
How lovely  to hear your 'voice' across the miles. As always you have managed to be first in my books.  
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life.  Patty Hansen.



rosepetals25
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3 posted 2001-06-07 07:54 AM


Kenthry,

     I like this Kenthry! It flows beautifully!  I'm always jealous of people can rythm so well... I just can seem to do it..hehe

TaraB

Kethry
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4 posted 2001-06-07 08:04 AM


Rosepetals25,
thank you for your response,how lucky you are to be able to NOT rhyme. My free verse and blank verse are both  atrocious because I can't not rhyme. I have a friend who says he could make a poet of me if I was less disciplined. lol.
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life.  Patty Hansen.



Sven
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5 posted 2001-06-07 09:23 PM


Kethry, I love the flow of this. . . it's totally amazing. . .and the emotion and feeling of it is just wonderful. . . you communicate it very well. . .



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Dennis
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6 posted 2001-06-07 09:26 PM


Missy, I believe this is one of your best!

Dennis

Watersign6
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7 posted 2001-06-07 09:42 PM


this is Excellent!!  
Charisma
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8 posted 2001-06-08 07:02 AM


your words flowing soft and so lovely. excellent write as always my friend.

((hugs))
Charisma

ethome
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9 posted 2001-06-08 07:24 AM


Kethry the words flow through the lines so beautifully in this piece.  Excellent traditional poetry and a real pleasure to read. I'm sure Marsha is more than pleased!!
Irish Rose
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10 posted 2001-06-08 08:24 PM


for Marsha!  How lovely!  Kethry, hope you are well!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Kethry
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Victoria Australia
11 posted 2001-06-09 03:05 AM


Sven,
flattery will get you everywhere  , thank you.

Dennis, thanks for the missy bit and thanks for the praise.

Watersign6,
What only one thumb up   I'll have to try harder.

Charisma,
your softness is spreading across the miles to me, thank you.

ethome,
I didn't exactly write this for Marsha, It's more I stole the words and re-arranged them to suit myself  .  How is my picnic partner anyway?

Irish Rose,
Marsha and I are practicing 'duelling banjoes' using the same phrases and putting them together in our own style. Its a game, thank you for your kind comments.

Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life.  Patty Hansen.



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