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ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2001-05-24 06:27 AM


                                   I've got to say one thing,
                                   If I could change your mind I'd be happy again.
                                   In every dream and every thought I see your face,
                                   Smiling at me.

                                   Girl from my heart strings,
                                   I can feel the sadness churn in me,
                                   like the wind upon a falling leaf
                                   spinning me round and round.

                                   Oh how my crying mind drives me insane.
                                   I can hear your mystic voice calling my name.
                                   If I could change it all I'd still be with you,
                                   now that I know the truth.

                                   I'm like a gypsy with nowhere to be.
                                   I got a crazy magic potion working in me.
                                   I'm caught in my heart and I can't break free
                                   you're stuck in my mind.....and you're so real
                                   now I can't forget about you.
                                   No I can't forget about you.

                                 © Eric True

This got lost in an open changeover so I'm reposting it.

The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up
spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to
re-language historie

© Copyright 2001 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
1 posted 2001-05-24 06:35 AM


Reminds me of some that I felt I could not forget about...but with disappointments and time the memories and the feelings fade...hopefully happiness and experiences will keep you together...James
Marsha
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2 posted 2001-05-24 06:44 AM


PT dear friend, you know how much I love it when you write and this one is utterly fabulous. Always you have an outstanding and brilliant touch. Yes love this is truly fabulous. I've missed too much good poetry to let this one slip past me.
Take care love as always
                   Mushy
                      

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2001-05-24 06:55 AM


If that 'getting lost' should ever happen again in a changeover, just notify a mod, for we surely wouldn't let things like this get by us....

nope, not the good stuff....

Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2001-05-24 07:02 AM


ETHome~
And, I got lost in your lovely song.
Beautiful in the key of blue.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                               noles1@totcon.com             

Waseem Cheema
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since 2001-03-16
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Pakistan
5 posted 2001-05-24 07:13 AM


Thank you for not forgetting me ethome...lolo    
1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22
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standing on a shadow's lace
6 posted 2001-05-24 07:14 AM


"I'm caught in my heart and I can't break free"

this line just grips me...helen

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

7 posted 2001-05-24 08:15 AM



                                   Oh how my crying mind drives me insane.
                                   I can hear your mystic voice calling my name.
                                   If I could change it all I'd still be with you,
                                   now that I know the truth.

                                   I'm like a gypsy with nowhere to be.
                                   I got a crazy magic potion working in me.
                                   I'm caught in my heart and I can't break free
                                   you're stuck in my mind.....and you're so real
                                   now I can't forget about you.
                                   No I can't forget about you.
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Classic bluesy rhymes to define the ache that never leaves us
written with your gifted soulful pen...
ya make us feel every word ... and thats a good thing
beautiful tune E-babes Passions own jukebox hit maker  

We wish ourselves beautiful,
we cry in the night.
Its not the love you fear ...
its the fall from the height.
~Edwin McCain~

Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
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missouri
8 posted 2001-05-24 01:20 PM


Now what can I say that hasnt already been said sweet poet man...'cept I still hear you singing every day...this lil MM well I will beahve....heheheh
angelbear
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since 2001-05-22
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North East, USA
9 posted 2001-05-24 04:35 PM


What a sincere and lovely poem. I know the feeling. Sometimes we meet someone, and unexpectedly they live in our hearts forever, no matter where they go. I must believe there is a reason for this. I tell myself that someday (maybe not here in this world) it will all make sense...  

Until you are are near it, you will never see it, until you live it you will never know it...this is why we must not judge it.

vandana
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10 posted 2001-05-24 05:30 PM


enjoy
latin passion
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11 posted 2001-05-24 06:05 PM


Awesome write - "that old black magic.." must be in the air.

let our hands communicate what's in our heart. A Wisp of a brush...

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
12 posted 2001-05-24 06:52 PM


You've captured the feeling of being hopelessly in love, captured in your own heart - oh, how I love so many of the lines in this poem
Well done, my friend
Liz

snowpants
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13 posted 2001-05-24 09:05 PM


Excellent write, ethome...love the message and the flow of this one...great work!

sp  

everytime I close my eyes,
I see your face,
I taste you on my lips...
every night I fantasize
that I can feel you on my fingertips...

Martie
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14 posted 2001-05-24 09:15 PM


Eric--I always know I'm in for a treat when I see your name...thanks for being you.
Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
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15 posted 2001-05-24 10:52 PM


Well, I am glad I didn't miss this one!
Saunni
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since 2000-07-11
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West Virginia
16 posted 2001-05-25 12:03 PM


I have to agree, this is so beautifully written.  

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

suthern
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Louisiana
17 posted 2001-05-25 09:59 AM


Thank you for reposting... for to have missed this would be such a loss. *S* This aches in such a familiar way - I'd swear you sneak in and read my diaries if your poems were more chaotic... but instead, the rhythm flows. LOL. Superb writing, ethome!
Charisma
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lost in blue pages
18 posted 2001-06-10 07:19 AM


Glad that ive visit your homepage, readed this one too, and found it far away between these blue pages. this is another one from you that have touched my heart.

(((Hugs)))
Charisma

Tovi
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since 2001-06-05
Posts 168

19 posted 2001-06-10 07:39 AM


I love the way you've written this.  It's very original and very good.  My compliments, ethome!  

Not only to say the right thing in the right place, but far more difficult, to leave unsaid the wrong thing at the tempting moment.

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