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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2002-07-01 01:56 AM


Here's a response to my own poetry challenge...

My dark journals
I keep sun in my dark journals.
It's how I build the night.
I keep birds in my dark journals.
They never sing in flight.
I keep forests in my dark journals.
The paths within diminished.
I keep words in my dark journals.
You wrote some, too. Unfinished.

I keep shadows in my dark journals.
They seem to write their own forms.
I keep rainfall in my dark journals.
Uncurled soundrush of storms.
I keep the sea in my dark journals.
Slowing apex movement.
I keep songs in my dark journals.
Harmony improvement.

I keep tarnish in my dark journals
to give your silver dimming light.
I keep sadness in my dark journals
to leave you seemingly no sight.
I keep death in my dark journals.
Whether or not you want this pain.
I write life in my dark journals.
Now you understand my reign.

These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun.
-RHCP

© Copyright 2002 MPC - All Rights Reserved
deep_thought
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since 2002-06-28
Posts 24

1 posted 2002-07-01 04:04 AM


AMAZING. I love your way of writing.

But then, a LOT of the work on this forum is simply fantastic. I've come to the right place

"The only real blasphemy is the refusal of joy"

Anvrill
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since 2002-06-21
Posts 710
in the interzone now
2 posted 2002-07-01 10:00 AM


Hmm... Spooky. Dark. Yet when you threatened to write this as Bronwen, I went totally on guard, so I'm disappointed that it didn't turn out dangerous. C'mon, y' can't get an evil idea then not go through with it!

"Es ist Folter, aber ich bin fast dort." Robert Smith's Torture in Deutsch.

devina
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539
Cali
3 posted 2002-07-01 10:17 AM


I enjoyed the colorful you in this Mike...

excellent examples!!! and here I went off with the whole stalker idea!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



bsquirrel
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4 posted 2002-07-01 07:58 PM


Glad you all enjoyed. And Lori, my heart wasn't in it.

These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun.
-RHCP

Krishankins
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5 posted 2002-07-02 11:15 AM


"I keep tarnish in my dark journals
To give you silver dimming light"

that's purdy dark Mike. You really put some good stuff together for this write!!

Kris

A bird never flies so high that it can't hit the ground

Anvrill
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since 2002-06-21
Posts 710
in the interzone now
6 posted 2002-07-02 05:23 PM


Yr heart wasn't in it, huh?

Look, I'm still standing on the edge of a poetic writer's block, so we'll see about me tackling this subject once I get my next Kissably chappy off.

"Es ist Folter, aber ich bin fast dort." Robert Smith's Torture in Deutsch.

bsquirrel
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7 posted 2002-07-02 08:46 PM


Hey, Kris. I didn't choose on bein' a moderator for Dark before without a reason.

And y' don't have t' write a response to the challenge, baby. *kiss*

These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun.
-RHCP

serenity blaze
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8 posted 2002-07-03 07:20 PM


I wasn't going to read these until I wrote my own answer to the challenge, but I seem to be having a word drought here.

I thought the "list type" repetitions very effective, and as ya know, I'm a fan of of your daring imagery...groan...I only THOUGHT I was "blocked" before, now I am intimidated too! sigh

much love to the dark genius!

Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17
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east coast
9 posted 2002-07-03 07:39 PM


Well done, Mikey... miss reading your poems!

~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

bsquirrel
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10 posted 2002-07-05 12:57 PM


Thanks for visiting! Don't leave! Appreciate it, Sen and Tier.

These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun.
-RHCP

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