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Snowdwen
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 75
Louisiana

0 posted 2001-05-24 08:35 AM


A pirfit fit would to at last
hold you close in my arms so.. close
our hearts beating as one..
music to my heart

the sun sets to yet a first purrfict day
we hold one another in a love's embrace..
no longer we wate.. but so close..
yet far away..

no longer to we long..
but dream of that day..
The sun is gone..
now we rest..

A new day begins.. Was it all a dream....
No your there laying beside me
Sleeping soundly.. a buety in its own.
I once again take you in my arms..
To awaken you for the start of dawn.

[This message has been edited by Snowdwen (edited 05-24-2001).]

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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
1 posted 2001-05-26 12:01 PM


just  trying to clean up your spelling and phrasing..

A perfect fit would be to at last
hold you close in my arms
so close our hearts beat as one..
music to my heart

The sun sets to yet a first perfect day
We hold one another in love's embrace..
no longer to wait..
so close, yet far away..

No longer do we long..
but dream of that day..
The sun is gone..
now we rest..

A new day begins..
Was it all a dream?
No...
You're there, laying beside me
Sleeping soundly, a beauty in it's own.
I once again, take you in my arms..
To awaken you
for the start of dawn.


I just  corrected spelling and a few words..I am not sure it is what you meant butI tried *s

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Snowdwen
Member
since 2000-09-16
Posts 75
Louisiana
2 posted 2001-05-26 09:46 PM


Wynter,
thanks for the help with the spelling.

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