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THE SLUT (revised)
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THE SLUT (revised) |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
With twisted screams of terror’s fright Nightmares fill my every night Gripping me with bitter chills As my soul it slowly kills Come the day I wake with dawn And one more piece of spirit gone I look inside at what’s to see But emptiness is all there be I have no heart I can not feel And to me love is not real So I will strike upon my foes With blinding speed that will expose Them for what they really are Nothing but a plastic star For my love no one dose care Of that fact I am aware So I’ll be charming and so cute As I then strip the armored suite That they cling to oh so tight With my soft touch I’ll steal their fright And when I see their heart is bare I’ll take my knife and plunge it there Then as I watch them sob and cry I will laugh and care not why For that’s been done to me as well Now I will put them through that hell With no feelings in my gut I tell you all I’m just a slut G. A. WEBB Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't [This message has been edited by G. A. Webb (edited 03-28-2001).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very interesting...James |
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Jellybean King Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 153Jelly, Bean |
I like the way you show the inner emptiness of her life...her spirit slipping away, piece by piece...but then, there is really something there...the emptiness has been replaced by (revenge) bitterness...her, lashing out to those who contributed to her condition (life style). Well done! Jellybean King |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
Thank you both. After speaking with my cheif inspiration I agreed that this was a bit too wordy at the end so I revised it. Here is the new version. I hope you all like it. Jellybean King: Perfict observation, that was exactly what I was going for in this one. But it can fit equally as well for a man as a woman, for a little "slut" lives in us all. Thank you! G Regret not that which you have done, |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow, very very very powerful words here. I really enjoyed this one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
This is...um, I know people like this. |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
Words, words....I can not find any to discribe my feelings after reading this...but yes, I know ppl like this as well. Thank you for an very interesting read, indeed... Until...ali "There is an alter ego which |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
dopey dope, mirror man a a-alibaster: Thank you all so much. I'm glad you liked (or at least found it interesting) my tortured view of a vengefull, broken hearted soul. Some might even say that this is a self portrate...lol. Thanks again! G Regret not that which you have done, |
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amyX Junior Member
since 2001-04-02
Posts 32 |
the ending, waiting for the admission of character, very appealling enjoyed so i'm sultry sexy slutty and not very well at ease .... |
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