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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
On the inside I am screaming, Hidding behind a smiling shadow, Everything appears to be alright, But no one sees who I become at night, When there aren’t any shadows to hid behind, On the inside I feel like I am dying, One more day one more time, Nothing ever seems to be as it is, When my heart is only his, He keeps it locked up in a glass case, On the inside I am always crying, A river of tears is drowing out my voice, As I scream for someone to help me, No matter how painful they just can’t hear, I am only looking for someone to help, On the inside I am falling apart, Every day another peice falls away, Slowly turning black and breaking, My heart exists only for his taking, With each thump I die once more "I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN "There is no always forever, just this"-the cure |
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firejerm Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217Springfield, OH, good ol USA |
Hey, listen to me and listen good! If this is about something you're caught up in, you would be surprised how many will be there for you if you just reach out. No one should feel that trapped. However, if this is a hypthetical piece, several can relate to it, and should still use my advice. Great work here about the truths of life. Thank you! Jeremy "Those little slices of death, how I loathe them." -Edgar Allen Poe |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
Great poem... even though i hate to admit it, but i can relate. Whenever I can relate to a poem, it makes me feel better that i'm not the only one. "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
ginners, screaming dying crying falling apart great subjects to write about, but hope this is not straight reality for you. hard to deal with being defined (and "confined")by someone else, I know it too well. helps to write about it. Kraw' |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
HEY!! Reach out and you will see there are MANY out there to help you. I truely understand where you are coming from though. But I have seen love does come and go and the REAL one is out there waiting for you. Take care, Mags No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
This isn't a real part of my life sometimes it is, at moments i may feel this way about my boyfriend, it gets that way being 17 and having the same b/f for a year now. but it isnt like this so please dont worry, only sometimes in my mind i feel this way. Thank you for your concern and all of your wonderful comments |
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Bee Junior Member
since 2000-11-23
Posts 23Ireland |
Well done Ginners! If you are able to express emotions so strongly, that are only transient, thank God, I feel you will be able to search for help, if you need it. The best place to look for it is within your own strong, self-confident YOU. Thanks a lot for sharing this one. Bee. |
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Temptress*Moon Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 240Long Island, NY |
Excellent work here Ginners *S* I enjoy reading your work, you seen to capture a lot of my feelings in your words.... TemptressMoon I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH- |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Hm.. I hope that you are able to straighten things out with this person. He seems to be causing you quite a great deal of grief. |
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Skoota Junior Member
since 2000-12-23
Posts 28Australia |
Ginners, you've done another fine job. I'm on the edge of my seat waiting for your next poem. A brilliant effort Sim Come to me Kill for me Worship me. Follow everthing I do Act it out before me Godhead - The Reckoning |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
lets just sa this agin and listen guys. this isnt how things really are with my b/f, i just can feel this way every now and then, not even often, i wrote this on a bad day for us, things are all better now, kinda but anyways, thank you all for your comments, Sim- and give me a day or two to finish what i am working on and i promise i will post it as soon as i can. Thanks again guys! |
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