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armanca
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 211
Tennessee

0 posted 2001-01-23 03:11 PM


When brutal smiles become kind lies
and cold hugs follow gentle rages
that make you realize lying awake
at night only feeds the demon
of your own fears.
Things that are worth dying
for don't even exist
and no one cares about the weeping flower
in the garden tonight.
The one that lost herself
because of someone elses fight.
And i'd give in to any of those brutal smiles
not to have ever known
about the kind lies.


~Carman

© Copyright 2001 Carman - All Rights Reserved
wandering
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since 2001-01-21
Posts 92

1 posted 2001-01-23 08:13 PM


a beautifully sad poem...I hope to see more. You write with emotion. Thanks for the read...wanderer

lost in thought, found in words.
wanderer

ThyWizard
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since 2000-08-06
Posts 56
Chambersburg, PA, USA
2 posted 2001-01-23 08:31 PM


Nice picture painted by " brutal smiles", but a rather sad ring to it.  All in all the piece flowed with a rather nice pace. Great work

" Pardon me while i burst into flames, i've done enough of the world, and it's peoples mindless cave, so pardon me, pardon me, i'll never be the same.

armanca
Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211
Tennessee
3 posted 2001-01-30 07:34 AM


thank you wandering and wizard... you're thoughts and replies are very appreciated


Carman

mystic requiem
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since 2001-01-26
Posts 144

4 posted 2001-01-30 10:23 AM


You have style!!!
This one captured me from the opening
lines!
Come visit my board.
Please email me, I could
not get through on your email.
*S*

mYsTiC


[This message has been edited by mystic requiem (edited 01-30-2001).]

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